Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence in past tense, avoid filler words, correct plural/singular mistakes, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I usually went with my grandparents, who took me for short walks and played with me on the playground. Sometimes we would do light exercises together, which made those visits both fun and healthy.

提案: Answer directly and use consistent tense. Avoid hesitations and informal fillers. Provide a concise reason with linking words (e.g., 'but', 'because'), and limit to no more than five sentences.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I rarely visit them now because I have started working and have little free time. When I do go, I prefer short walks to relax and clear my mind.

提案: Use correct grammar (conditional/modal) and more precise vocabulary. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give two specific benefits using linking words like 'because' or 'such as'. Avoid vague phrases like 'more cleans' and 'like explore.'

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and provide green spaces for relaxation. For example, parks can offer walking paths and playgrounds, which encourage people to exercise and socialize.

提案: Give a clear, grammatically correct answer: name the park accurately, use present conditional for future plans, and provide specific activities you would do there. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I would like to visit Botum Park, which is a lakeside park next to the Independence Monument in Phnom Penh. I plan to take a walk around the lake and relax there, perhaps sitting on a bench and reading or just enjoying the view.

× Umm, actually I really like going to parks as a child and I mostly go there with my grandpa grandparents and they brought me there to have a little walk or sometime I'm doing some exercise with them, playing at the playground and stuff.

✓ Umm, actually I really liked going to parks as a child and I mostly went there with my grandpa and grandparents; they brought me there to have little walks, and sometimes I did exercises with them, played at the playground, and so on.

The speaker refers to past habits, so past tense should be used (liked, went, brought, did, played). Mixing present tense with past context is incorrect. Also use plural/singular correctly and parallel verb forms. Suggestion: identify time frame words (as a child) and consistently use past tense verbs and parallel lists separated by commas or semicolons. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× I'm talking about like going to the park. I thinks I still love going to the park, but at the same time, at the moment I don't have a lot of time to go since I already start working and I had very less time to rest. So yeah.

✓ I'm talking about going to the park. I think I still love going to the park, but at the moment I don't have a lot of time to go since I have already started working and I have very little time to rest.

Subject-verb agreement: 'thinks' is incorrect for 'I'—use 'think'. Tense consistency: 'already start' should be present perfect 'have already started' to indicate a change that affects present. 'had very less time' is ungrammatical; use 'have very little time' for quantity and present tense. Suggestion: use base verb with 'I' (I think) and use present perfect for actions beginning in the past with present relevance, and replace 'less' with 'little' for uncountable nouns. (Grammar problem type ID: 27)

× Yeah, actually I would love to see the city had a lot of parks as it will provide the city more cleans and also more places to be like explore.

✓ Yeah, actually I would love to see the city have a lot of parks as they would provide the city with cleaner air and more places to explore.

Incorrect verb form 'had' should be 'have' in this hypothetical desire; use conditional 'would' for results. Preposition 'provide the city more cleans' is wrong: use 'provide the city with cleaner air' (provide X with Y). 'to be like explore' is wrong—use 'to explore'. Suggestion: use correct collocations 'provide X with Y', maintain parallel structure, and choose accurate nouns ('cleaner air') and infinitive forms for purpose ('to explore'). (Grammar problem type ID: 11)

× Yes, I would love to go to what Bottom Park, which which is lake located next to the independent monument in Phnom Penh City and I would love to go down for a walk or some stuff like that and then had a little chill with myself.

✓ Yes, I would love to go to Wat Botom Park, which is a lake located next to the Independence Monument in Phnom Penh City, and I would love to go there for a walk or do similar things and then have a little time to chill by myself.

Tense and verb form errors: 'which which is lake located' needs 'which is a lake located' and use present simple for descriptions. 'go down for a walk' is unnatural; use 'go there for a walk'. 'then had a little chill' mixes past tense 'had' with conditional 'would love'—use 'have a little time to chill'. Also 'with myself' should be 'by myself'. Suggestion: use present simple for descriptions, correct article usage 'a lake', and consistent verb tenses and idiomatic prepositions ('by myself'). (Grammar problem type ID: 6)