Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Muy bien: tu respuesta es clara, tiene estructura y detalles personales. Para mejorar, reduce la repetición («used to» aparece varias veces) y añade una oración resumen breve y natural para cerrar. También evita frases largas sin pausas; intenta usar un conector simple para variar (por ejemplo, “also” o “sometimes”).

例: I loved going to parks as a child because I spent quality time with my dad and sister. We usually went on Saturday mornings and sometimes on Sunday evenings, and my mom joined us occasionally. It was the highlight of our weekends.

提案: Buena respuesta con ideas claras y vocabulario apropiado. Para mejorar, evita palabras vagas como “a beautiful time” y corrige pequeñas imprecisiones gramaticales («play a lot like football» → «play sports like football»). Añade un enlace lógico y una breve razón para explicar por qué te gusta ir ahora (por ejemplo, for exercise or socializing).

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks; it’s one of my favorite activities. I usually go with friends or my sister, although my dad rarely comes now. We often play sports like football or basketball, which is great exercise and a fun way to socialize.

提案: Muy bien planteada y con buenos motivos. Para mejorar, reduce la repetición («own creativity, their own imagination») y usa conectores para mayor fluidez (por ejemplo, “because” y “for example”). Añade un ejemplo específico de cómo un parque puede beneficiar a la comunidad.

例: Yes, I would. Parks provide open space where children can develop creativity and social skills because they encourage free play and interaction. For example, a park with play equipment and community events helps neighbors meet and build stronger ties.

提案: Respuesta clara y concreta. Para mejorar, corrige errores pequeños de forma («part» → «park», «in there» unnecessary) y añade una razón personal más específica (por ejemplo, a famous event, scenery or facilities). Usa un conector para enlazar la razón con el deseo de ir.

例: Yes, I’d like to visit a park in Monterrey called Parque Zimbabwe. It’s popular for community sports and weekend matches, and I’d love to go to watch a game and experience the lively atmosphere.

× we used to go in the morning and on Sundays we used to go in the evening

✓ we used to go in the morning and on Sundays we used to go in the evenings

The original mixes singular/plural for 'evening' after 'Sundays'. When referring to repeated occurrences on Sundays, use the plural 'evenings'. Use 'evenings' to indicate multiple instances over time.

× unfortunately my dad does not go with me right now

✓ unfortunately my dad does not go with me right now

No correction needed for third person singular here; the verb form 'does not go' is already correct for present simple negative with third person singular.

× I go with my friends, sometimes with my sister and unfortunately my dad does not go with me right now

✓ I go with my friends, sometimes with my sister, and unfortunately my dad cannot come with me right now

The original 'does not go with me right now' is grammatical but sounds unnatural when explaining a current inability. Replacing with 'cannot come with me right now' uses a more natural verb and modal for expressing inability in the present.

× it would be a great improvement in all the cities

✓ it would be a great improvement for all the cities

Use the preposition 'for' to indicate benefit or improvement pertaining to cities. 'In all the cities' suggests location rather than benefit.

× Yes, there is a particular part in Monterrey that it's called Zimbabwe

✓ Yes, there is a particular park in Monterrey that is called Zimbabwe

Two issues: 'part' should be 'park' (word choice) and the clause 'that it's called' is ungrammatical. Use 'that is called' or 'called'. Also 'there is a particular park in Monterrey' uses 'there is' correctly to introduce existence.

× this is a very popular park in there where a lot of people meet

✓ this is a very popular park there where a lot of people meet

Using both 'in' and 'there' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'there' alone or 'in Monterrey'. 'park there' or 'park in Monterrey' are correct.

× we spend a beautiful time and we play a lot like football or basketball

✓ we have a great time and we play a lot, such as football or basketball

'Spend a beautiful time' is unnatural; use 'have a great time'. Also 'play a lot like football' is ambiguous; 'such as football or basketball' clarifies examples. The change keeps intended meaning and corrects collocation.