Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Зменшіть кількість пауз і заповнювачів («uh», «umm») та говоріть більш послідовно: почніть із короткої основної відповіді, потім додайте 1–2 чіткі деталі. Використовуйте правильні часові форми і прості зв’язки (for example, also, and) для плавного переходу між думками. Також уникайте повторів і виправляйте граматичні помилки (наприклад, «I met» -> «I used to meet» або «I would meet» залежно від значення).

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often took my dog there and we spent a lot of time playing. I also went to the park with my mother, and I used to meet my friends there to play games.

提案: Зменшіть заповнювачі і говоріть чітко: сформулюйте основну ідею однією реченням, потім додайте причину і частоту. Використовуйте точні вирази часу (daily, weekly) і зв’язки (because, but, however).

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but because of my studies and work I cannot go every day; however, I try to visit a park once a week to relax.

提案: Говоріть більш лаконічно і правильно: уникайте зайвих повторів («it have, it has») і використовуйте однину/множину правильно. Почніть із прямої відповіді, потім наведіть приклад і конкретні деталі (location, facilities).

例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city. For example, Park Natalka in the Obolon district has excellent facilities, such as children's playgrounds and separate areas for dogs.

提案: Зменшіть невпевненість у мовленні та пояснюйте чітко: назвіть конкретне місце і опишіть пару точних рис. Уникайте запізнілих доповнень і повторів. Використовуйте більш зв’язні фрази (for example, it is located on, it features, it offers) і правильний порядок слів.

例: Yes, there are several parks I'd like to visit, but one in particular is on an island in Italy. It is located near the coast, has a small zoo and many quiet areas where I could relax and enjoy nature.

× I have a dog and uh, with her we go, we went to the park and spend a really good time.

✓ I had a dog and with her we went to the park and spent a really good time.

The student mixes present perfect ('have') with past actions ('went') and uses present tense 'spend' instead of past 'spent'. The context asks about childhood, so past tense is required. Use past simple for completed past events: 'had', 'went', 'spent'.

× also I like uh, to go to park with my mother.

✓ Also I liked going to the park with my mother.

The phrase 'go to park' is missing the definite article 'the'. Additionally, because this refers to childhood, the verb should be in the past ('liked' or 'liked going'). Prefer the gerund 'going' after 'liked'.

× also I can met with my friends there.

✓ Also I could meet my friends there.

The original mixes modal/tense forms: 'can met' is ungrammatical. For past ability or habitual actions in childhood, use 'could' + base verb: 'could meet'. Also omit the preposition 'with' if not necessary: 'meet my friends' is natural.

× but umm, because of my studying and my work, I can't do it uh, daily, but I'm trying to find umm, time to do it weekly.

✓ Because of my studies and my work, I can't go every day, but I'm trying to find time to go weekly.

Use plural noun 'studies' instead of 'studying' as a noun phrase, and 'go' fits the activity. 'Daily' is acceptable but 'every day' is more natural. Maintain present simple for habitual inability ('can't') and present continuous for ongoing effort ('I'm trying').

× because we have a really good parks, for example, Park Natalka, it's in Obulon district and it have, uh, it has really good infrastructure for children, for example, uh, playgrounds and for dogs, they have, uh, different playgrounds.

✓ We have a really good park, for example Park Natalka. It's in the Obolon district and it has very good infrastructure for children, for example playgrounds, and for dogs there are separate areas.

The student used plural 'parks' but refers to a single example, so use singular 'park'. 'Obulon' should be 'Obolon' (spelling) and needs the definite article with 'district'. 'It have' is subject-verb disagreement; use 'it has'. 'For dogs, they have different playgrounds' is awkward; clarify with 'there are separate areas' or 'dog playgrounds'.

× it is in Italy, umm, in the and I, it is an island, uh, where it is located and uh, uh, it, it has zoo and umm, very quiet places.

✓ It is in Italy; it is on an island where it is located, and it has a zoo and very quiet places.

Use preposition 'on an island' not 'in the' plus missing article before 'zoo' ('a zoo'). Remove redundant fragments. Ensure correct article use: 'a zoo' and 'very quiet places' (no article needed).