Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然、时态一致并注意语法与简洁性。可用一到两句直接回应（主题句），然后补充具体细节。避免犹豫词（uh）。例如将“can”改为过去式“could”，并把“having my fun time”改为更地道的表达。

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I could meet my friends there. We often played games and had picnics, which made those afternoons really fun.

提案: 回答要用更礼貌且连贯的表达，注意时态和自然用词。开头可以直接回答（No, not really），接着用一到两句说明原因并用连接词（because / and）。避免否定式连续出现（did not need）。

例: Not really. I don't go as often now because I feel less interested in playgrounds, and I can meet friends in other places like cafés or at home.

提案: 内容要具体、逻辑清晰并使用恰当词汇。避免重复“It’s because”，并修正错误搭配（“sing green plants”应为“surrounded by green plants”或“seeing green spaces”）。给出一两条具体理由或例子，使用连词增强连贯性。

例: Yes, I would. More parks would improve air quality and provide pleasant places for people to relax, and being surrounded by greenery usually helps reduce stress.

提案: 回答应更清晰、有条理并避免重复和语法错误。先给出直接回答，然后说明两个具体原因（不方便 + 朋友不去），用连词连接并把动词时态和副词拼写正确（often）。避免断句和重复。

例: Not really. It's not very convenient for me to get to parks, and my friends rarely want to go, so I don't plan any specific park visits soon.

× Yes, I used to go to the park because I can meet my friends and also having my fun time, uh, when I was in the park.

✓ Yes, I used to go to the park because I could meet my friends and also have fun when I was there.

句子讲述过去的经历，时态应统一为过去时。原句中出现现在时的 can 和现在分词 having，与 used to 和 when I was in the park（过去）时态不一致。应将 can 改为过去式 could；把 having my fun time 改为 have fun，并将重复的短语精简为 when I was there，使表达更自然。

× Not really because I'm not that childish as before and also umm, I did not need to go to the park to meet my friend nowadays.

✓ Not really, because I'm not as childish as I used to be, and I don't need to go to the park to meet my friends nowadays.

第一部分比较结构错误，应为 not as... as 或者 as... as，且要和过去对比用 used to be。第二部分谈现在情况，应使用现在时态 don't need 而不是过去时 did not need；friend 应为复数 friends，因为指多个朋友或泛指。整体时态需与 nowadays（现在）一致。

× Yes, it's because more parks in my city can improve the atmosphere in nowadays society. It's because when people sing green plants it will improve your emotion.

✓ Yes, it's because more parks in my city can improve the atmosphere in today's society. When people are surrounded by green plants, it improves their mood.

1) nowadays society 用法不自然，常用 today's society 或 simply nowadays。2) when people sing green plants 是词语错误（sing 应为 surround/see/enjoy 等），且动词短语需要正确搭配；这里用 be surrounded by 或 are surrounded by 更合适。3) 情感的表达应使用 mood 而不是 emotion，更自然。时态和主语代词也需一致（their 而不是 your）。

× Not really, it's because going to the park it's not that convenient for me and also umm I like I would like to go to the parks with with my friend more oftenly, but they are not. Did not, did, did not like to go into the parks.

✓ Not really. Going to the park isn't very convenient for me, and I would like to go to the parks with my friends more often, but they don't like to go to the parks.

1) 双重主语和缩略不当（going to the park it's）应简化为 Going to the park isn't...。2) more oftenly 是错误形式，应为 more often；often 已为副词。3) friend 应为复数 friends，指多位朋友。4) 表否定现在习惯应使用 don't like，而不是片段式的过去时 did not, did, did not。5) 句子结构需连贯，避免断裂断句，保持主谓一致与时态一致。