Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses and plural forms, and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks when I was a child. I often went with my friends after school to ride our bikes and play on the swings. We would also sit and chat on a bench, which was a nice way to relax together.

提案: Give a clear direct response followed by specific reasons using correct tense and linking words. Avoid repetition and repair fragmented sentences. State frequency if possible.

例: Not really. As a university student I don't live near a park, so I rarely visit one. However, when I go back home or visit my old school, I sometimes stop by a park to relax.

提案: Answer directly and finish your thought with a clear reason, using linking words for coherence. Use accurate nouns/plurals and avoid trailing off. Provide one or two specific benefits of more parks.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because urban areas can be crowded and stressful. More green spaces would give people places to exercise, relax, and escape from busy streets.

提案: Provide a complete, coherent answer. If you don't have a specific park in mind, explain why and give a contrasting example or brief reason. Use linking words and avoid vague generalizations and unfinished sentences.

例: Not really — I don't have a particular park I want to visit because many parks are similar, with trees and playgrounds. Instead, I would prefer visiting a famous or unique park, such as a large botanical garden or national park, if I had the chance.

× I like to go to Park when I was a child.

✓ I liked going to the park when I was a child.

Tense inconsistency: 'I like' is present but 'when I was a child' is past. Use past tense 'liked' and the gerund 'going' for habitual past actions; 'park' needs the article 'the' and lowercase 'park'. Suggestion: use past tense for childhood habits and include the definite article before 'park'.

× I often go to Park with my friend later after the school and will riding the bike and playing on the playground or just hand around and talk in the park.

✓ I often went to the park with my friends after school; we would ride bikes, play on the playground, or just hang around and talk in the park.

Multiple errors: 'Park' needs the article 'the'; 'later after the school' is redundant and incorrect—use 'after school'; 'will riding' mixes future auxiliary with gerund—use 'would ride' or 'rode' for past habitual; 'the bike' to plural 'bikes' if more than one; 'hand around' is a wrong verb, should be 'hang around'; subject plural 'my friends' fits typical school context. Suggestion: use past habitual constructions ('went', 'would ride', 'played') and correct verb forms and prepositions.

× Not really. I'm now as a university student but there isn't a park near my university so I have no much I didn't have much reason to go through the park, but if I back to school I still occasionally go to the park.

✓ Not really. I'm now a university student, but there isn't a park near my university, so I don't have much reason to go to the park; however, if I go back to school I still occasionally go to the park.

Tense and expression errors: 'I'm now as a university student' incorrect phrasing—use 'I'm now a university student'; 'have no much' is ungrammatical—use 'don't have much'; 'I didn't have much reason' mixes past and present—keep present 'don't have'; 'go through the park' wrong preposition—use 'go to the park'; 'if I back to school' missing verb—use 'if I go back to school'. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense and correct verb forms and prepositions.

× Of course I think the park is important for the city because cities can be overcrowded or stressful so people so the city can provide some green spaces for people to relax or get away from the building and the

✓ Of course. I think parks are important for a city because cities can be overcrowded and stressful, so the city should provide green spaces for people to relax or get away from the buildings.

Article and number: use 'parks' plural or 'the park' consistently; 'important for the city' better as 'important for a city' generalizing; 'overcrowded or stressful' needs 'and' not repeated 'so people so'; 'provide some green spaces' is fine but better 'should provide green spaces'; 'building' needs plural 'buildings'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements, connect clauses correctly, and complete the final noun.

× No, I think the park around the world is the same like there are a lot of trees and the small playground and the families and the children play in the park so I think it's same so I just

✓ No, I think parks around the world are similar: they often have many trees, small playgrounds, and families with children playing, so I think they are the same.

Number and article errors: 'the park around the world is the same' should be plural 'parks around the world are similar'; 'a lot of trees' acceptable but match plural 'playgrounds'; 'the families and the children play' awkward—use 'families with children playing'; 'it's same' incorrect—use 'they are the same' or 'they are similar'. Suggestion: use plural forms when speaking generally, keep subject-verb agreement, and simplify sentence to avoid repetition.