Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the sentence grammatically correct, be more concise, and include a brief specific memory to enrich content. Use a clear topic sentence followed by one supporting detail. Avoid redundancy and correct verb forms and prepositions.

例: Yes. I loved going to the park with my parents because it was a rare chance to spend time together after their long workdays. For example, I remember feeding ducks at the pond and playing on the swings until sunset.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and be concise. Mention an alternative you prefer to show contrast.

例: Not really. Parks in Hong Kong are usually crowded with tourists taking photos and making short videos, which makes them noisy and less relaxing. Therefore, I prefer quieter places like small local gardens or hiking trails when I have free time.

提案: Give a clear direct answer and support it with specific reasons and a linking phrase. Correct word choice (noisy) and add a brief concession or alternative to show balance. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: No, not really, because Hong Kong is densely populated and adding more parks would likely make them overcrowded and noisy. However, I would welcome better-maintained or larger green spaces that can accommodate more people comfortably.

提案: Use a clear topic sentence and correct grammar (singular/plural, articles). Provide a specific reason and one concrete example of what you hope to see to make the answer more vivid.

例: Yes, I would like to visit Taroko National Park in Taiwan because it has spectacular natural landscapes and diverse wildlife. For instance, I hope to hike the marble gorge and see native birds and wild macaques.

× Yes, when I was a child I loved to going to park with my parents because they are busy to work so I enjoy the time with them.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I loved going to the park with my parents because they were busy with work so I enjoyed the time with them.

Use of 'to going' is incorrect; verbs after 'loved' take the -ing form, so 'loved going' is correct. 'to park' needs the article 'the park'. 'are busy to work' is wrong: use past tense 'were busy with work'. 'I enjoy' must match past context: use 'I enjoyed'. Suggestions: use correct verb forms after modal/verbs (loved + -ing), use articles with singular countable nouns, use appropriate preposition 'with', and keep tense consistent.

× No, because in Hong Kong the park is very crowded, there's a lot of tourists walk around and take photo, even doing Tik Toks. So I don't like this kind of place in my free time.

✓ No, because in Hong Kong the parks are very crowded; there are a lot of tourists walking around and taking photos, even making TikToks. So I don't like this kind of place in my free time.

Mixed singular/plural and present tense usage: 'the park is' should be plural 'the parks are' when speaking generally. 'there's a lot of tourists' is incorrect; use 'there are a lot of tourists' for plural. Use gerunds after verbs in continuous sense: 'tourists walking around and taking photos'. 'take photo' needs plural 'photos'. 'doing Tik Toks' is better as 'making TikToks'. Suggestions: match singular/plural, use 'there are' for plural existence, and use gerunds for ongoing actions.

× No, I don't actually like to see more parks in my city because Hong Kong is quite small place so it would be very crowded and noise.

✓ No, I don't actually want to see more parks in my city because Hong Kong is quite a small place, so it would be very crowded and noisy.

Missing article before 'small place': use 'a small place'. 'dont actually like to see more parks' more natural as 'don't actually want to see more parks' (but main correction is article). 'noise' is a noun; the adjective 'noisy' is needed to describe 'it'. Suggestions: include articles before singular countable nouns and use appropriate adjective forms (noisy) to describe places.

× I want to visit Taiwan National Park in the future because the park have naturally landscapes and also a lot of wild animals.

✓ I want to visit Taiwan National Park in the future because the park has natural landscapes and also a lot of wild animals.

Subject-verb agreement with 'have': for singular 'the park' use 'has' (related to 'There be' and agreement). 'naturally landscapes' is incorrect: use adjective 'natural' before 'landscapes'. Suggestions: ensure subject and verb agree in number and use correct adjective forms (natural landscapes).