Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be grammatically accurate and give a brief, natural response with a supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one specific memory or reason using a linking word. Avoid filler sounds.

例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks when I was a child. For example, I used to play football with my friends every weekend, which made those visits very fun and memorable.

提案: Answer directly and correct common grammar and word choice errors. Use linking words to explain reason and give one specific activity you do there. Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I still visit parks because I often feel bored at home. Also, going for a walk or reading on a bench helps me relax and clear my mind.

提案: Be clear about your opinion and avoid repetition and hesitations. State whether you would like more parks, give a reason, and one concrete suggestion or example. Use plural agreement and remove filler words.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are not many green spaces. For instance, new neighborhood parks would give families a safe place for children to play and for residents to exercise.

提案: Give a definite answer rather than vague hesitation. Mention a specific park or type of park and a reason why you want to visit it. Use one linking word to add detail and keep sentences concise.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the national botanical garden next year because I enjoy seeing different plants and taking photos of flowers.

× I do like go to parks when I was a child.

✓ I liked going to parks when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'do like' with past time phrase 'when I was a child'. Use simple past 'liked' and the gerund 'going' after like. Suggestion: Use 'liked going' for past habitual actions.

× Yes I do go to parks now because I sometimes I boring at the home so sometimes I need to enjoy or relax myself by going to park.

✓ Yes, I do go to parks now because I sometimes get bored at home, so I need to enjoy myself or relax by going to a park.

Multiple issues: 'I sometimes I boring' is incorrect word order and word form; use 'I sometimes get bored' (present simple passive/adjective with get). 'at the home' should be 'at home' (article error). 'relax myself' is unnatural; 'relax' or 'relax myself' can be simplified to 'relax'. 'going to park' needs an article: 'a park'. Keep present simple for habitual actions.

× I think, uh, there's not much parks in my, uh, city, so uh, I would like to, uh, go to a park where I usually, uh, attend.

✓ I think there aren't many parks in my city, so I would like to go to a park that I usually visit.

'There's not much parks' mixes singular contraction 'there's' with plural noun and uses 'much' (used with uncountables). Use 'there aren't many parks' for countable plural. 'attend' is incorrect verb for visiting a park; use 'visit'. Also remove unnecessary commas and filler words.

× Uh, yes, maybe I want to go, uh, to any parks in the future because, uh.

✓ Yes, maybe I want to go to some parks in the future.

Use 'some parks' rather than 'any parks' in a positive statement. The phrase 'in the future' fits with simple present 'want' for planned desire, but you can also use 'would like to' or 'want to' + 'go to some parks'. Remove trailing filler 'because' without completion.