Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорите яснее и грамматически правильно: используйте простые времена (past simple) и стройте одно-два связных предложения. Избегайте заполнителей (umm, uh) и повторов. Дайте ясное утверждение и одно-два конкретных примера (что вы делали в парке).

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played on the swings and had picnics with my family, which made those visits very happy memories.

提案: Упражняйтесь в стройных предложениях: начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте конкретные детали и используют связки (because, so, and). Избегайте лишних слов и исправьте неверные фразы (e.g. "maternity life").

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially with my children. We often have picnics and play on the swings because it is a good way to spend time together and let the children run around.

提案: Говорите точнее и используйте корректную лексику: избегайте прямых переводов ("payable"). Постройте ответ: краткое мнение, затем 1-2 конкретных причины с логическими связками (because, for example).

例: Yes, my city already has many parks, and I enjoy visiting them. For example, they have a lot of playgrounds and swings, and some parks are more maintained or have entrance fees for extra facilities.

提案: Сформулируйте мысль ясно: скажите, какой парк вы хотите посетить и почему. Используйте past simple для описания того, что сказал муж, и модальные глаголы (would like to) для желания. Избегайте повторов и неясных фраз.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the parks in Dubai. My husband went there two years ago and described beautiful gardens and attractions, so I am very interested to see them myself.

× Yes, I enjoy on going to park as a child, umm, when in my child childhood I dream uh, uh, going to park and uh, umm, make a joy with my uh, ages uh, But unfortunately my parents brought me sometime there.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. When I was a child I used to dream about going to parks and having fun, but unfortunately my parents only took me there sometimes.

The original sentence uses incorrect present tense and awkward constructions for past memories. Use past tense 'enjoyed' and 'was' for childhood. Use plural 'parks' for general visits (singular/plural agreement) and 'sometimes' in correct position. Replace 'make a joy with my ages' with 'having fun' to express enjoyment. Use 'used to' to indicate habitual past action. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yes. Still, uh, I like going to park with my children. Right now I'm a mother and I live in a maternity life and I bring, uh, really my kids to, uh, park. And uh, I enjoy with them, uh, having a picnic and also day swings, uh, in the park.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks with my children. I am a mother now, and I often take my kids to the park. I enjoy having picnics with them and taking them on the swings.

The original mixes present tense with incorrect nouns and phrases. Use 'still' before the verb and plural 'parks' or 'the park' consistently. 'I am a mother now' is clearer than 'I live in a maternity life.' Use 'take' instead of 'bring' in this context. 'Enjoy having picnics' and 'taking them on the swings' are natural expressions. Maintain present simple for habitual actions. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× My city fortunately has more parks and I enjoy going to each going to each of them. Uh, they're so interested. Uh, is it has many swings, playgrounds and even we have a payable and private.

✓ Fortunately, my city has many parks and I enjoy going to each of them. They are very attractive. They have many swings and playgrounds, and some are public while others are private.

Fix word order ('Fortunately' before subject) and redundant phrasing ('going to each going to each'). 'They're so interested' is incorrect; use 'They are very attractive' or 'interesting'. 'Payable and private' is unclear; replace with 'some are public while others are private' to contrast types of parks. Adjust quantifiers 'many parks'. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× Yes, my husband, uh, two years ago went to Dubai and he said about the parks of the year I liked and I I'm so interested for them and I want to go and visit them as, uh, well as I want.

✓ Yes, my husband went to Dubai two years ago and he told me about the parks he liked there. I am very interested in them and I want to visit them as well.

Correct word order for time expression ('went to Dubai two years ago'). Use 'told me about the parks he liked' instead of 'said about the parks of the year I liked'. Use present simple 'I am very interested' for current interest and 'want to visit them as well' for intention. Remove redundant phrases. Use proper prepositions: 'interested in' not 'interested for'. Grammar problem type ID: 5}]} PMID:INVALID_TOKEN_TOO_LONG_TRUNCATION_PROBLEM.}