Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答自然且相关，但需注意时态一致、句子简洁以及避免重复信息。可以将主题句和细节分开，用连接词使表达更连贯；将“when I was young”之后使用过去式，并删去重复的“after school”。

例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. There was a park near my home where I often played with my classmates after school, and we usually spent time on the swings and played tag.

提案: 内容清晰且有具体原因，但句子略显重复（两次用“relaxing”）。可以使用更多连接词与多样词汇，并注意句子长度不宜过长。

例: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks after work because they help me relax and breathe fresh air. I also like going on weekend mornings to listen to birds singing, which makes the start of my day peaceful.

提案: 观点明确但表达有小错误（‘environmental friendly’应为 ‘environmentally friendly’），细节可以更具体，举例说明公园的具体好处，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I would. Parks benefit people by providing green space for exercise and relaxation, and they also support wildlife — for example, birds and small mammals can find food and shelter there, which is environmentally friendly.

提案: 答案含有许多重复与语法错误（例如多余的“it”与错误的时态/结构）。应先给出明确地点，然后用一两句具体描述，避免重复并纠正语法。

例: I'd like to visit a seaside park in Joseph Joseph in the future. It sits right beside the sea, so I imagine walking along the shore there would offer lovely views and a refreshing sea breeze.

× Yes, when I was young, I really like going to parks after school.

✓ Yes, when I was young, I really liked going to parks after school.

句子描述过去的习惯或经历，应该使用过去时。原句中主句使用了过去时间状语“when I was young”，因此动词“like”应改为过去式“liked”。建议将动词与时间状语保持时态一致。

× There was a park near my residential area and I always went there playing with my classmates after school.

✓ There was a park near my residential area, and I always went there to play with my classmates after school.

原句中“went there playing”结构不自然，应使用不定式表示目的或习惯动作用法“went there to play”或使用现在分词但需改为“went there, playing with...”，更自然是使用不定式。建议用“to play”明确表示去公园的目的或习惯。

× Definitely, I still like going to parks after a whole day's work because it's relaxing and healthy to breathe fresh air in the park.

✓ Definitely, I still like going to the park after a whole day's work because it's relaxing and healthy to breathe fresh air in the park.

句中既有“going to parks”又有“in the park”，指同一概念时应保持一致。若指一般去公园的习惯，通常用单数可数名词前加定冠词“the park”表示去那类地方的习惯用法。建议将两处统一为“the park”。

× Besides, at weekends, especially in the morning, it's relaxing to hear birds singing in the parks.

✓ Besides, at weekends, especially in the morning, it's relaxing to hear birds singing in the park.

这里泛指在公园里听鸟唱歌的感觉，使用单数“the park”更自然且与上下文一致。复数“the parks”会让句子显得不连贯。建议统一使用“the park”。

× Yes, parks are not only good for human beings, but also good for animals.

✓ Yes, parks are not only good for human beings but also good for animals.

原句中逗号在“but also”前多余。语法上不要求逗号，去掉逗号更符合英语并列结构的惯用法。

× Birds and small cats can find their habitats in parks and this is quite environmental friendly.

✓ Birds and small cats can find their habitats in parks, and this is quite environmentally friendly.

“environmental friendly”是错误搭配，应使用副词修饰形容词“environmentally friendly”。另外在并列分句处加逗号更清晰。建议使用“environmentally friendly”。

× I want to go to a park in Joseph Joseph. It is it features the seaside.

✓ I want to go to a park in Joseph Joseph. It features the seaside.

第二句“It is it features the seaside.”包含重复的主语“it is it”，是句子结构错误。应删除多余部分，使句子为“It features the seaside.”或者合并为“One park there features the seaside.”。建议写成简洁的陈述句。

× It's a park located beside the sea.

✓ It's a park located beside the sea.

该句语法正确，无需修改。保留原句即可。

× I think it's it will has it will be a nice view to walk along the seaside.

✓ I think it will be a nice view to walk along the seaside.

原句中出现多重冗余和时态错误：“it's it will has it will be”混杂了不同时态并包含多余词汇。正确说法为“I think it will be a nice view to walk along the seaside.”或更自然地“I think it will be nice to walk along the seaside.”建议删除冗余部分，并使用将来时“will be”来表示未来的观点。