Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense (past), reduce redundancy, and add one specific detail. Use linking words if adding details.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents often took me to a small local park where I spent hours on the swings and slides. Because the park was near my home, I visited it almost every weekend and made many childhood friends there.

提案: Avoid filler words (uh) and correct awkward phrases. Give a clear topic sentence, explain current situation with concise reasons, and use linking words like 'however' or 'but'. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. However, I am now a junior clerk and I am quite busy during weekdays, so I usually visit a nearby park to relax only on weekends.

提案: Give a direct answer and avoid repetition. Correct grammar and be specific about why you like a particular park. Use a linking phrase to add the reason.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. For example, Ranaji Garden is my favorite because it has well-kept flower beds and a peaceful pond, but I think more parks with playgrounds and seating areas would benefit our neighborhoods.

提案: Make the reply concise and grammatically correct. Name the park clearly, state why you want to visit it with specific details (amenities), and avoid repetition like 'famous'.

例: Yes, I would like to visit Baroda's largest park in the future. I have heard it has extensive walking trails, sports facilities and botanical gardens, so I would love to spend a weekend there to explore and relax.

× I like to going park when I was a child and my parents often took me to the parks and I enjoyed very lot in the parks.

✓ I liked going to parks when I was a child, and my parents often took me there; I enjoyed them a lot.

Mixed tense and verb form errors: 'I like to going' mixes present 'like' with gerund 'going' and wrong infinitive+gerund. Because the context is past, use past tense 'liked' and the gerund 'going' or 'going to parks'. 'park' needs plural or article; 'parks' is more natural. 'I enjoyed very lot' is incorrect word order and quantifier — correct is 'enjoyed them a lot.' Improve by keeping past tense consistent and using correct verb forms and quantifiers. Suggested practice: form past-tense narratives by converting present verbs to past and use correct gerund/infinitive forms (e.g., 'liked going to parks').

× In the parks I play with swings.

✓ In the parks I played on the swings.

Tense mismatch and incorrect verb-preposition collocation: speaker meant past habit, so use past tense 'played'. 'Play with swings' is unnatural; correct collocation is 'play on the swings.' Improve by matching tense to context and using correct preposition with playground equipment. Suggested practice: learn common collocations (play on the swings, play on the slide).

× Of course, uh, still I won't.

✓ Of course, yes, I still do.

Wrong auxiliary and negative form: 'I won't' indicates future refusal and contradicts 'Of course'. The examiner asked about current liking, so present tense affirmative is required: 'I still do.' Also typical conversational response uses 'yes' or 'of course, I still do.' Improve by using correct auxiliary 'do' for present simple emphasis. Suggested practice: practice short responses to yes/no questions using appropriate auxiliaries ('I do', 'I don't', 'I did', 'I didn't').

× I like to go to the park. Uh, currently I'm, uh, I'm working as a junior clerk, so I don't have much time to go to the parks, but on the weekends I go to the parks for relax.

✓ I like to go to the park. Currently I'm working as a junior clerk, so I don't have much time to go to parks, but on the weekends I go to the parks to relax.

Several preposition and article issues: 'go to the parks' vs 'go to parks' — when speaking generally, 'go to parks' or 'go to the park' is fine; be consistent. 'for relax' is incorrect; correct infinitive is 'to relax.' Removed filler words and duplicated 'I'm.' Improve by using correct infinitive and consistent article usage. Suggested practice: study use of 'to' + verb for purpose (to relax) and article choices for general vs specific nouns ('the park' vs 'parks').

× Yeah, I have just said so many parks in my city and every park is very beautiful and but one of the most favorite my park is Ranaji Garden which is located to.

✓ Yes, I have many parks in my city and every park is very beautiful, but one of my favourite parks is Ranaji Garden, which is well known and centrally located.

Multiple errors: 'I have just said so many parks' is ungrammatical — likely meant 'I have many parks' or 'There are many parks.' 'Most favorite' is redundant; use 'one of my favourite parks.' 'Which is located to' is incorrect; provide correct phrase like 'which is centrally located' or 'which is located in [area].' Improve by using natural quantifiers, correct possessive order, and proper relative clause structure. Suggested practice: learn common expressions ('one of my favourite', 'there are many parks') and how to form relative clauses with location ('located in/near/next to').

× Of course, my dream park is I want to go to is the Baroda's biggest part, which famous, which is very famous and it has all the amenities we can enjoy.

✓ Of course. The park I want to visit is Baroda's largest park, which is very famous and has many amenities we can enjoy.

Awkward sentence structure and tense/word choice problems: 'my dream park is I want to go to is' repeats and misorders clauses—restructure to 'The park I want to visit is...'. 'Biggest part' should be 'largest park.' 'Which famous, which is very famous' is repetition; use one phrase 'which is very famous.' Also use 'has many amenities' rather than 'it has all the amenities we can enjoy.' Improve by simplifying structure and choosing correct superlative/adjective forms. Suggested practice: practice forming relative clauses and compact sentences for expressing desires (e.g., 'The place I want to visit is...').