Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, ngữ pháp đúng thì quá khứ, mạch lạc và có thêm chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi thì để phù hợp (ví dụ: “I wanted” thay cho “I want”). Nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, rồi nối thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể về ký ức, hoạt động hoặc cảm xúc để làm phong phú câu trả lời.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my parents, and we would feed the ducks and have picnics under big trees. Those visits were always busy and lively, which made them fun and memorable.

提案: Cần dùng thì hiện tại để nói thói quen hiện tại và tránh lỗi cấu trúc (ví dụ: “When I go to the park, it makes me feel relaxed”). Hạn chế tiếng lắp và các mệnh đề lặp. Thêm lý do cụ thể hoặc ví dụ về hoạt động bạn làm ở công viên để câu phong phú hơn.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. When I go there, it makes me feel relaxed because the air is fresh and I can walk or read on a bench. For example, I often take a short walk after work to clear my mind.

提案: Câu trả lời cần ngắn gọn, chính xác và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: “I would like to see more parks because they make the city fresher and provide peaceful places”). Nên giải thích thêm một lý do cụ thể hoặc lợi ích thiết thực (ví dụ: sức khỏe cộng đồng, không gian cho gia đình) và dùng từ nối để mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they make the urban environment fresher and offer peaceful places for people to relax. For instance, more parks would give families a safe space to spend weekends and help improve public health.

提案: Cần nêu rõ tên địa điểm nếu có và dùng cấu trúc câu chính xác để diễn tả dự định (ví dụ: “I would like to visit... because I want to see...”). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về lý do và hoạt động bạn muốn trải nghiệm để câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the famous Central Park in New York in the future. I want to see its beautiful scenery, watch people enjoying various activities, and perhaps join a public event or go boating on the lake.

× Yes, I did. Yes, because when I was a child, I want to go to the parks with my parents.

✓ Yes, I did. Yes, because when I was a child, I wanted to go to the parks with my parents.

The speaker refers to a past habitual feeling, so the main verb should be in the past tense. Use 'wanted' instead of 'want'. Suggestion: use past simple for actions or desires that occurred in the past (e.g., 'I wanted to go').

× Is have a large appens is have a lot of people.

✓ They had a large open space and many people.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and missing articles and correct nouns. Use 'a' before singular countable nouns ('a large open space') and 'many' for countable plural ('many people'). Also change tense to past to match context. Suggestion: form complete clauses with subject + verb (e.g., 'They had...').

× Yes, of course, because when I got went to the park, when I go to the park is make me feel relaxing and uh, the air is fresh.

✓ Yes, of course, because when I go to the park it makes me feel relaxed, and the air is fresh.

Mixed and incorrect verb forms: 'got went' is wrong and tenses are inconsistent. For habitual present actions use present simple: 'when I go... it makes me feel relaxed.' Use adjective 'relaxed' not 'relaxing' to describe feeling. Remove redundant clauses. Suggestion: use consistent present simple for habitual statements and correct adjective choice ('relaxed').

× Yes, of course I want to see more parts in my city because it's make my city fresh and have a lot of peaceful place. Yes, and in the weekend.

✓ Yes, of course I want to see more parks in my city because they would make my city fresher and provide many peaceful places, especially on weekends.

Multiple issues: 'parts' should be 'parks' (word choice), 'it's make' incorrect subject-verb agreement and tense; use 'they would make' or 'they would help make' or present 'they make'. 'Have a lot of peaceful place' needs plural 'places'. 'in the weekend' -> 'on weekends'. Suggestion: ensure noun agreement and correct preposition for time ('on weekends').

× Yes, I want to go to the Face Mart famous park in the world is I want to see the view and the people in there and activity in the park.

✓ Yes, I want to go to the famous Face Mart park in the world because I want to see the view, the people there, and the activities in the park.

Awkward word order and extra verbs. Use adjective order 'famous Face Mart park' and remove extra 'is'. Use parallel nouns with commas: 'the view, the people there, and the activities'. Maintain present tense for future plans with 'want to'. Suggestion: keep clear sentence structure and parallelism when listing reasons.