Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response grammatically correct, more natural and slightly longer (1–3 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a brief specific detail about what you did there. Avoid filler words like “actually.”

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played on the swings and climbed trees with my friends, and we also had picnics on weekends.

提案: Give a clear direct answer and a concise reason using correct grammar and linking words. Use one linking phrase (e.g., “because” or “although”) and be specific about your current situation. Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

例: I like parks less now than I did before because I am very busy with work. However, I try to visit occasionally at weekends to relax.

提案: Respond directly and provide specific suggestions, using linking words for coherence. Correct word order and add details about what features you want (e.g., more plants, play areas, exercise equipment). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city, especially with more trees and flower beds. Also, I think parks should include activity areas like playgrounds and outdoor exercise equipment.

提案: Answer clearly naming the place and give a specific reason. Use correct names and correct grammar; avoid repeating words. Provide one supporting detail about what attracts you to that park. Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to visit Central Park in the US because I enjoy its large green spaces and cultural attractions. I also want to see the lakes and historic bridges there.

× Actually, yes, I like to go the park for playing.

✓ Actually, yes, I liked going to the park to play.

Tense and verb form: The question asked about childhood (past), so use past tense 'liked'. Also use correct article 'the' before 'park' and change 'for playing' (awkward) to the infinitive purpose 'to play'. Suggestion: match verb tense to time reference, use correct article and natural infinitive purpose phrases.

× Actually is lost than past because it because it's uh, I have many work.

✓ Actually, I enjoy them less than in the past because I have a lot of work.

Multiple errors: tense and meaning—compare present with past using 'less than in the past'. Pronoun/subject missing: add 'I'. 'Is lost' is incorrect; use 'enjoy them less'. 'I have many work' is wrong quantifier and noun; use 'a lot of work' or 'much work'. Suggestion: include subject, use comparative structure 'less than', and correct noun phrase for uncountable 'work'.

× Actually I would like to many plants also activity in park.

✓ Actually, I would like to have more plants and activities in parks.

Incorrect quantifier and sentence structure: 'to many plants' is ungrammatical—use 'more plants'. 'Also activity' should be plural 'activities'. Preposition/article: use 'in parks' or 'in the park(s)'. Suggestion: use 'more' with plural nouns and make parallel structure 'more X and Y'.

× Actually, yes, I want to go to to pay park in you US because I like this bark.

✓ Actually, yes, I want to go to a paid park in the US because I like that park.

Several errors: duplicated 'to to' remove one. 'Pay park' should be 'paid park' or 'paid parks' meaning parks that charge admission; better 'a paid park'. 'you US' incorrect pronoun—use 'the US'. 'this bark' misspelling and wrong demonstrative—use 'that park' or 'parks there'. Suggestion: remove duplication, use correct adjective 'paid', correct country article 'the US', and correct noun spelling 'park'.