Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要用正确的时态和更自然的表达，注意句子结构和词汇搭配。可以把主题句明确化，用一两句补充具体细节并用连接词衔接。避免重复和语法错误。

例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I often went there with my parents or close friends, where we would chat about daily life and play games together.

提案: 注意时态和词汇选择，改用正确的短语（例如 'after a busy day'）。可以用连接词解释原因并举例说明频率和感受，使回答更具体且自然。

例: Yes, definitely. After a busy and tiring day I sometimes visit the parks near my home because the quiet atmosphere helps me relax and clear my mind.

提案: 回答内容清晰但可更自然流畅。把观点放在首句，用连接词解释原因并提供具体例子（比如活动或时间），避免中文式表达如 'relax myself'。

例: Yes, definitely. I enjoy visiting different parks because they give me a peaceful space to walk or listen to music. For example, I often spend an hour in a park on weekends to unwind.

提案: 注意时态一致性，使用现在或将来时更合适（例如 'I would like to visit' 或 'I want to visit'），并补充具体细节（哪个公园、什么时候或计划的活动）以使回答更具体。

例: Yes, I would like to visit one of the seaside parks in my city next month. I hope to walk along the shore, breathe the fresh air and take photos of the beautiful views.

× Yes, I like when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child.

句子时态混用。“I like”是现在时，而后半句“when I was a child”表示过去。应将喜欢用过去时（liked），并用动名词短语表达到“喜欢去公园”。建议统一使用过去时并用动名词表示习惯性动作："I liked going to parks when I was a child."

× I always wanted to park with my parents or with my good friends.

✓ I always liked going to the park with my parents or with my good friends.

原句中使用了动词"want"（过去式wanted），与表示过去习惯性活动的语境不符，且直接用"park"作动词不自然（park作动词通常指停车）。应使用表示习惯的动词like的过去式liked并用动名词短语"going to the park"表示去公园的动作。故改为"I always liked going to the park..."。

× We just talked about some daily stuff or just played with each other.

✓ We would just talk about daily things or play with each other.

原句时态不一致且口语中表达过去习惯更自然用"would"或过去时复数形式。将"talked"和"played"改为不带过去式的习惯性表达（would + 动词原形）或统一为过去时复数（we talked... we played...）。此处用"would"更强调过去的经常性："We would just talk... or play..."。

× Yes, definitely. Especially when I through a busy and tired day, I sometimes go to parks near my home.

✓ Yes, definitely. Especially when I am through a busy and tiring day, I sometimes go to parks near my home.

原句中"through a busy and tired day"结构不正确。应使用短语"through a busy day"或用现在完成或现在时态描述感受。形容词"tiring"更适合描述使人感到累的事情（忙碌的一天让人疲惫）。同时需要主语和谓语一致："when I am through a busy and tiring day" 或更自然的说法是"after a busy and tiring day"。建议用"after a busy and tiring day"或"when I am through a busy and tiring day"。

× That is a meaningful thing for me. I can just go around or listen to music to relax myself.

✓ That is meaningful to me. I can just go for a walk or listen to music to relax.

"a meaningful thing"在此不太自然，可改为形容词短语"meaningful to me"。"go around"含义模糊，常用表达为"go for a walk"。"relax myself"冗余，常用不带反身代词的"relax"。因此更自然的表达是"I can just go for a walk or listen to music to relax."

× I live in a coastal city. There are many parks by the sea. I want to visit a seaside park because I wanted to enjoy fresh air and splendid views.

✓ I live in a coastal city. There are many parks by the sea. I want to visit a seaside park because I want to enjoy the fresh air and splendid views.

句中时态混用：前半句为现在时（I want），最后却用过去式"wanted"，造成不一致。应将最后一句改为现在时一致表述当前愿望："I want to enjoy..."。同时在可数名词前加定冠词"the"更自然："the fresh air"。