Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct basic grammar (articles, verb forms, prepositions), and avoid redundancy. Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences. Add one or two specific details (name of park or a memorable activity) and use linking words like "often" or "because."

例: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child. I often went with my grandmother in the mornings, and we would jog together and then have breakfast on a bench. I especially remember a small pond where we fed the ducks, which made our visits very relaxing.

提案: Start with a clear direct answer and give one or two concise reasons using linking words like "because" and "also." Avoid fillers ("umm") and repetitive phrases. Mention a specific activity you prefer and a brief time constraint to make it concrete.

例: Not really — I rarely go to parks now because I find them boring and I prefer socializing online with my friends. Also, I am very busy studying most days, so I usually use my free time to review notes or chat on my phone.

提案: Answer directly and provide specific reasons with clearer language and grammar. Use linking words like "because" and "for example." Replace vague claims with concrete benefits (shade, cleaner air, places for families). Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid hesitations.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide shade and green space for families. For example, parks with many trees and flowers improve air quality and offer places for children to play and people to relax.

提案: Give a clear direct response and explain why with specific ideas. Avoid repeating words ("experience" twice) and correct grammar ("how an AI park would be"). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to visit an AI-themed park in the future because I am curious how technology could be used in attractions. For example, interactive robots or augmented-reality exhibits could make visits more educational and fun.

× Yes, of course I like going to park.

✓ Yes, of course I liked going to the park.

Use of the definite article 'the' is required before singular countable noun 'park' when referring to a specific place type; also the question refers to the past (as a child), so the past tense 'liked' is appropriate. Suggestion: use 'the park' and match tense to context by using past tense verbs when talking about childhood.

× As a child I usually went to park with my grandmother for in the morning.

✓ As a child, I usually went to the park with my grandmother in the morning.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'park' and remove the unnecessary preposition 'for'. Use a comma after the introductory phrase. 'In the morning' is the correct time expression. Suggestion: use 'the park' and place time expressions like 'in the morning' at the end or beginning correctly.

× We always like work together and chat together during jogging and eating breakfast.

✓ We always liked working and chatting together while jogging and eating breakfast.

Because the speaker refers to past habitual actions, use past tense 'liked'. Use verb+ing (gerund) after verbs like 'like' when referring to activities: 'liked working and chatting'. Use 'while' to connect simultaneous activities and remove redundant 'together'. Suggestion: use past tense for past habits and 'verb + -ing' for activities (e.g., 'liked working and chatting').

× No, I do not like going to park now because it's quite boring for me.

✓ No, I do not like going to the park now because it's quite boring for me.

Use 'the' before 'park' when speaking about parks in general in this context. Countable singular nouns generally need an article. Suggestion: include appropriate articles ('the' or 'a') before singular countable nouns.

× I prefer playing with my phone or umm speaking or checking with my friend online.

✓ I prefer playing on my phone or talking to or checking with my friend online.

Use 'playing on my phone' for activities done using a phone. Use 'talking to' rather than 'speaking' alone and 'checking with' is acceptable but pair with 'with my friend'. Suggestion: choose correct prepositions for activities (e.g., 'on my phone', 'talking to someone').

× And now I'm so busy for studying I don't have time to go to park.

✓ And now I'm so busy studying I don't have time to go to the park.

Do not use 'busy for studying'; use 'busy studying' or 'busy with studying'. Add 'the' before 'park'. Suggestion: use 'busy studying' or 'busy with my studies' and include 'the' for 'the park'.

× Yes I would like to see more park in my city UMM park all over many different type of tree and flowers.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Umm, parks with many different types of trees and flowers.

Use plural 'parks' when referring to more than one. Add punctuation to separate ideas. Use 'types of trees' and plural 'trees' and 'flowers'. Suggestion: use plural nouns when discussing multiple items and correct noun phrases: 'types of trees'.

× They are eco friendly and they can clean our UMM air.

✓ They are eco-friendly and they can clean our air.

Use hyphenated adjective 'eco-friendly' and remove filler 'UMM'. 'Our air' is sufficient. Suggestion: use standard adjective forms and avoid fillers in formal speech.

× To become to release more oxygens is good for our.

✓ Releasing more oxygen is good for us.

Use gerund 'Releasing' to express purpose/result. 'Oxygen' is an uncountable noun (do not add 's'). 'Good for us' completes the idea; the original sentence omitted the object. Suggestion: use uncountable noun forms and complete the sentence with a proper object ('us').

× Maybe I want to go to AI park in the future.

✓ Maybe I would like to go to the AI Park in the future.

Use 'would like' to express a polite or hypothetical future desire. Add 'the' before a named park if it's a specific place and capitalize as a proper noun 'AI Park'. Suggestion: use 'would like' for future preferences and include 'the' plus correct capitalization for place names.

× I can't imagine how AI park be like.

✓ I can't imagine what the AI Park would be like.

Use 'what ... would be like' to imagine a hypothetical situation. Include 'the' and proper capitalization for the park name. The original used incorrect word order and missing modal 'would'. Suggestion: use 'what ... would be like' for imagining future scenarios and include articles for specific places.

× So it's I think it's quite interesting that when I go to that AI park in the future, maybe I can experience some new experience.

✓ So I think it's quite interesting; when I go to that AI Park in the future, maybe I can have new experiences.

Remove redundant 'it's' and duplicate words. Use plural 'experiences' and 'have' rather than 'experience some new experience'. Use punctuation to separate clauses and proper noun capitalization. Suggestion: simplify sentences to avoid repetition, use correct verbs ('have') with 'experience' if needed, and use plural 'experiences' for multiple new things.