Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g., 'liked', 'listened') and articles ('the park' or 'parks'). Avoid repetition and keep to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I really enjoyed going to parks as a child. I liked spending time in nature because it made me feel calm, and I often listened to music while walking there. As a result, being in the park helped me reduce stress and feel more positive.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear main sentence and specific reasons. Use correct grammar and avoid filler words. Mention one clear reason and link it with words like 'because' or 'so'. Be careful with word order and proper nouns (e.g., 'Prague').

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks today because they offer a peaceful break from constant screen use. For example, many people are absorbed in social media and devices, so I prefer spending time outdoors to relax and connect with nature.

提案: Give a direct answer then support it with specific benefits and a linking word. Fix grammar (e.g., 'Would you like' → 'Yes, I would' or 'Yes, I would like to see more parks') and avoid vague phrases. Use one or two concrete advantages such as health, recreation, or community space.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide greenery and clean air. Additionally, more parks would give residents places to exercise, relax and meet friends during free time.

提案: Answer with a clear topic sentence naming the type of park you want to visit, then give one or two specific details about why. Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'adventure park', 'outdoor games') and avoid fillers. Keep it concise and coherent.

例: Yes, I would like to visit an adventure park in the future because it offers outdoor games and physical activities. For instance, I am interested in obstacle courses and zip-lines as a fun alternative to phone-based entertainment.

× Yeah, I like going to the parks as a child because I love so much to spend my time in nature.

✓ Yeah, I liked going to parks as a child because I loved spending my time in nature.

The sentence describes past habits, so past tense should be used (liked, loved, spent). Also use 'going to parks' (no definite article) and 'loved spending' is the correct verb+ing structure after 'love'. Suggestion: Use past simple for past routines and 'verb + -ing' after verbs of liking.'

× I like going outside.

✓ I liked going outside.

Context indicates childhood, so change to past tense 'liked'. The original sentence itself has no article error; correction aligns tense with context.

× I listening music when I I'm in park rather than being at home.

✓ I listened to music when I was in the park rather than being at home.

Multiple errors: verb form and auxiliary needed ('listened to'), subject-verb agreement and past tense ('was'), and missing articles ('the park'). Use 'listened to' for the action and 'was' for past continuous/state. Suggestion: Use 'listened to music when I was at the park.'

× Being at room alone when I go to the park it reduce my all stress and give me positive vibe.

✓ Being alone in my room reduces all my stress and gives me positive vibes, but when I go to the park it helps me relax.

Original mixes tenses and has word order and article errors: 'being at room alone' should be 'being alone in my room'; subject-verb agreement requires 'reduces' and 'gives'; 'positive vibe' pluralized to 'positive vibes'. Also sentence conflates ideas; suggestion splits or clarifies cause and effect and matches present simple for general statements.

× Yeah, I still like going to parks now because nothing is changed the way before.

✓ Yeah, I still like going to parks now because nothing has changed from before.

Use present perfect 'has changed' to describe a change from past to present. 'the way before' is awkward; use 'from before'. Suggestion: Use present perfect for changes over time.

× I like to spend my time in parks now also I like to spend in Prague because in this generation all are busy in social medias, uh, phone, laptop, TV, tablet, but I want to talk to nature I.

✓ I like to spend my time in parks now, and I also like spending time in Prague because in this generation people are busy with social media, phones, laptops, TVs, and tablets, but I want to be with nature.

Pronoun and noun errors: 'all are busy' -> 'people are busy'; 'social medias' -> 'social media'; plural forms for devices and correct prepositions ('busy with'). 'talk to nature I' is incorrect—use 'be with nature'. Also match gerund forms 'spending time'. Suggestion: Use 'people' and 'busy with' and correct device plurals.

× Yeah, I like to see more parks in city because who don't want a greenery, uh, fresh air to their city.

✓ Yeah, I would like to see more parks in the city because who wouldn't want greenery and fresh air in their city?

Add definite article 'the city'. Use conditional/modal 'would' for polite preference. 'Who don't want' should be 'who wouldn't want'. 'a greenery' is incorrect—'greenery' is uncountable, no article. Use 'in their city'. Suggestion: Use 'the city', 'would', and treat 'greenery' as uncountable.

× Yeah, so that's why I like to see more parks in my city. I can explore more parks in my free time.

✓ That's why I would like to see more parks in my city; I could explore them more in my free time.

Use consistent modal for preference ('would like') and conditional 'could' to express possibility. Also avoid repetition; 'them' refers back to parks. Suggestion: Use 'would like' and 'could explore them' for clarity.

× I have gone a lot of parts like normal packs, but I want to, uh, go adventurous park.

✓ I have been to a lot of parks, like regular parks, but I want to go to an adventure park.

Use present perfect 'have been to' for experience. 'parts' -> 'parks'; 'normal packs' -> 'regular parks'; 'go adventurous park' -> 'go to an adventure park'. Suggestion: Use correct preposition 'to' with 'go to' and correct nouns.

× Like there are lots of games, uh, not like a mobile phone game, but outside game for that replacement and uh, that's it all.

✓ There are lots of games there, not mobile phone games but outdoor games as an alternative, and that's all.

Adjective/noun forms: 'outside game' -> 'outdoor games'; 'for that replacement' awkward -> 'as an alternative'. Also pluralize 'games'. Suggestion: Use 'outdoor games' and 'as an alternative' for clarity.