Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

× Yes, I'd like to go to park in my childhood and I went to the park with my friends and played together.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks in my childhood. I went to the park with my friends and we played together.

The student used 'I'd like to go to park in my childhood' which mixes present conditional with past time and omits the plural and correct -ing form. Use past simple or past habitual for childhood: 'liked going to parks'. Also use plural 'parks' and include 'going' (verb + -ing). Combine actions with 'we' for clarity.

× Yes, I still like go to park because I like to work in the park. Umm include including uh green as I take a fresh air is very good for me.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks because I like to work in the park. Being surrounded by greenery and getting fresh air is very good for me.

Errors: missing -ing after 'like' (verb + -ing), 'go to park' needs article or plural, and awkward phrases 'include including uh green' and 'take a fresh air'. Use 'going to parks' and 'surrounded by greenery' or 'surrounded by green' and 'getting fresh air'. Use 'fresh air' without 'a'.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in, in my city because, uh, it's very good for me or and other persons to be mini green there. It's very relaxing people.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because it is very good for me and other people to be surrounded by greenery there. It is very relaxing.

Problems: unnecessary commas and filler words removed. 'Other persons' is unnatural; use 'other people'. 'Be mini green' is incorrect — use 'surrounded by greenery'. Also fix sentence ending 'It's very relaxing people' to 'It is very relaxing.' Article 'the' not needed before 'parks in my city'.

× If you have life.

✓ If I have the chance in the future, I will visit more parks.

Original sentence 'If you have life' is ungrammatical and unclear. It seems the student meant a future possibility. Use a clear conditional: 'If I have the chance' and complete the sentence with the intended action 'I will visit more parks'.