Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Улучшите грамматику и последовательность ответа: используйте прошедшее время (was/were, went), корректные глагольные формы и более чёткую структуру (тема + поддержка). Устраните лишние слова и повторы, добавьте одно-два конкретных примера (что вы делали в парке).

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents often took me for walks there, and we would feed the ducks and have picnics on the grass. Those outings made me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: Сформулируйте мысль ясно и грамматически правильно: используйте настоящее простое или настоящее продолженное, объясните причину коротко и дайте альтернативу. Избегайте повторов и исправьте ошибки в строении предложения.

例: Not really. I rarely visit parks these days because I prefer indoor activities and I can see trees from my window. Instead, I usually go for a short walk in my neighborhood if I need some fresh air.

提案: Улучшите связность и лексику: начните с прямого ответа, затем приведите 2 конкретные причины, используя связки (because, so, for example). Избегайте разговорных вставок (umm) и неточных фраз («vibe for sink»).

例: Yes, I would. Parks improve air quality and make the city more attractive, so they help people feel refreshed. For example, I like sitting in a park with a cup of coffee to relax and recharge.

提案: Улучшите точность и грамматику: используйте правильные артикли и порядок слов, уберите повторы (it's it is) и уточните, почему парк привлекает (какие растения, какие тропинки). Добавьте связующее предложение с ожиданиями.

例: If possible, I would like to visit the Botanical Garden in Almaty. It is a stunning place with rare plants and peaceful walking trails, so I expect it would be a relaxing and interesting day out.

× When I was a child, yes, I do.

✓ When I was a child, yes, I did.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'did' for past simple instead of 'do'. Suggestion: match the verb tense to the time expression by using past simple for past events.

× My father, uh, going around with a park with me and then we handed out together with my mom and with my dad.

✓ My father used to take me to the park, and we spent time there together with my mom.

The original sentence lacks a main verb form and has incorrect verb choices ('going around with a park', 'handed out'). Correct structure needs a past-tense verb phrase 'used to take' or 'took' and a clear phrase for spending time. Suggestion: use 'used to' or simple past for habitual past actions and say 'spend time' rather than 'hand out'.

× So I think it's yes.

✓ So I think so.

After 'I think', use 'so' to agree; 'it's yes' is ungrammatical and mixes a contraction with an affirmation. Also the main clause 'I think' can be followed by 'so' to express agreement. Suggestion: use 'So I think so' or 'So yes' depending on emphasis.

× To be honest, no, because now I don't going to the park because I think that it's not meaningful to going to the park like seeing trees because you can see see trees when you at home.

✓ To be honest, no, because now I don't go to the park; I think it's not meaningful to go to the park just to see trees, since you can see trees at home.

The verb after 'do' must be in base form ('go'), not '-ing' form. Use 'don't go' for present simple negative. Also 'to going' is incorrect; use 'to go'. 'When you at home' lacks the auxiliary verb 'are'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms after auxiliary verbs and correct infinitive forms after 'meaningful to'.

× So yeah.

✓ So yeah.

No grammatical correction needed; this is a discourse marker. No change required.

× In my opinion yes.

✓ In my opinion, yes.

Add a comma after 'In my opinion' for clarity; tense is appropriate. Suggestion: use comma after introductory phrase.

× Because seeing trees it's gets more energy for you.

✓ Because seeing trees gives you more energy.

The clause 'it's gets' incorrectly combines 'it is' with a verb in third-person singular. Use a single main verb 'gives' in present simple. Suggestion: simplify the sentence to subject + verb + object: 'seeing trees gives you more energy.'

× I think that and umm you can go at the park with your coffee like umm vibe for sink.

✓ I think you can go to the park with your coffee and enjoy a relaxed vibe.

Use 'go to' not 'go at' and 'vibe for sink' is unclear and incorrect. 'Enjoy a relaxed vibe' conveys intended meaning. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('to' for destination) and clear collocations like 'enjoy a relaxed vibe'.

× If possible I would like to go the Botanic park in the Almaty.

✓ If possible, I would like to go to the Botanic Park in Almaty.

Need 'to' after 'go' and use correct article usage: drop 'the' before city names and use capitalized proper noun 'Botanic Park'. Also add comma after introductory phrase. Suggestion: 'go to the Botanic Park in Almaty' or 'go to Botanic Park in Almaty' depending on official name.

× It's it is stunning and place with deserve with plants and the peaceful walking trails.

✓ It is a stunning place with many beautiful plants and peaceful walking trails.

The original repeats 'it's it is' and has incorrect phrases 'place with deserve with plants'. Use an article 'a' before 'stunning place' and clear modifiers like 'many beautiful plants'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use natural adjective-noun order and correct prepositions ('with').

× So I think it will be a relaxing and interesting day out.

✓ So I think it will be a relaxing and interesting day out.

This sentence is grammatically correct and uses future tense appropriately. No change needed.