Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğrudan ve ilgili ancak dilbilgisi ve akıcılık geliştirilmelidir. Geçmişten bahsederken doğru zaman kullanımı (liked, spent), çoğul ve iyelik (parks, children's games), ve gereksiz tekrarların azaltılması gerekiyor. Ayrıca cümle sayısını 2–3 ile sınırlayarak daha doğal bir akış kurun. Bağlaçlarla örnek veriler arasında net bağlantı kurun (e.g., “for example” yerine “for instance” ya da “such as”).

例: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child. I often spent time there with my friends, playing children’s games such as hide-and-seek and tag, which I enjoyed because they were active and fun.

提案: Cevap kısa ve doğal ama olumsuz ifadeyi daha kibar ve dilbilgisel olarak doğru kurmalısınız. "Not at all" çok kesin; yerine "not really" ya da "I don’t go often" gibi daha uygun ifadeler kullanın. "Spend time on my own" gibi doğru yapı ve zaman kullanımı (don't have enough time to spend) gereklidir. Kısa bir neden ve gerektiğinde alternatif bir aktivite ekleyin.

例: I don't go to parks very often now because I don't have enough time to spend on leisure activities. Instead, I usually relax at home or meet friends at cafés when I have free time.

提案: Cevap olumlu ve fikir net ancak dilbilgisi (children, fresh air) ve tekrarlar düzeltilmeli. Cümleleri daha akıcı ve kısa tutun; nedenleri mantıksal bağlantılarla sunun (for example, because, so). Ayrıca spesifik faydalar ekleyin (sağlık, sosyal etkileşim).

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because children need safe outdoor spaces to play and socialize. For example, parks improve physical health and give families places to relax together.

提案: Cevap belirsiz ve dilbilgisi hataları var (not really, rely on parks, impressive). Soruyu doğrudan yanıtlayın, sonra gerekçeyi kısaca açıklayın. Eğer seyahat tercihlerinizi belirtmek istiyorsanız bunu açıkça söyleyin ve bir örnek verin. Cümle sayısını 2–3 ile sınırlayın.

例: Not really — I don't have a particular park in mind because I prefer traveling to new countries and exploring different places. For instance, I would rather visit national parks abroad to see famous landscapes.

× Yes, when I was a child, I like to spend my time in park with my friends.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I liked to spend my time in the park with my friends.

Must use past tense 'liked' to match 'when I was a child'. Also 'in park' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place, and 'the park' is the usual collocation.

× Sometimes we play games like you know, child's games, for example, hide and seek or.

✓ Sometimes we played games like, you know, children's games, for example, hide-and-seek.

Use plural 'children's games' to indicate games belonging to children, and past tense 'played' to match the past time frame. Also hyphenate 'hide-and-seek' as a fixed phrase.

× Not at all, because I don't have enough time for spends with my own.

✓ Not at all, because I don't have enough time to spend on my own.

'Time to spend' uses the infinitive 'to spend', not 'spends'. 'On my own' is the correct phrase meaning 'alone'.

× So in this part of my life, not really.

✓ So at this stage of my life, not really.

'At this stage of my life' is the natural expression in English for the current period; 'in this part of my life' is awkward. This is a phrasing correction to fit present-tense context.

× Absolutely yes, because I strongly believe that Childs should have more places to play games with friends, with their friends or spend time with fresh air or outside.

✓ Absolutely yes, because I strongly believe that children should have more places to play with their friends or to spend time outdoors.

Use plural 'children' (not 'Childs'). 'Play with their friends' avoids repetition. 'Spend time outdoors' is the idiomatic phrase; 'fresh air' can be used but 'outdoors' is simpler and grammatical here.

× Not at all, 'cause I'm not rely on parts right now.

✓ Not at all, 'cause I don't rely on parks right now.

Use auxiliary 'do' with the base verb: 'do not rely' -> 'don't rely'. Also 'parts' is incorrect; 'parks' is intended.

× I I like to visit new countries or no new places.

✓ I would like to visit new countries or new places.

To express desire for the future, 'would like' is more natural here. 'No new places' is incorrect; use 'new places'. Remove the duplicated 'I'.

× It's more impressing for me.

✓ It's more impressive to me.

'Impressing' is the present participle; the correct adjective is 'impressive'. Also use 'to me' rather than 'for me' in this context.