Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but reduce fillers ("umm") and make the response more concise with one topic sentence plus one supporting detail. Add a specific memory or example to make it more vivid. Also avoid repeating similar ideas (nature/outside).

例: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child because I enjoyed playing games with my friends there. For example, every weekend we would meet at the big oak tree to play hide-and-seek, and I remember the warm sunshine and birdsong making it a very happy place.

提案: Good direct response and reason. Improve by using a linking word and providing a specific frequency or recent example to enhance credibility. Replace vague phrase "not so much time" with a clear time reference.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks; however, because I am busy with university and part-time work, I usually visit only once or twice a month. Last month I went for a short walk in the park to relax after exams.

提案: The answer is short and a bit repetitive. Start with a clear opinion and give one or two specific reasons (e.g., benefits like recreation, green space, or health). Use a linking phrase to connect opinion and reason.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because green spaces provide places for exercise and relaxation. For instance, new parks could offer playgrounds for children and quiet areas for students to study outdoors.

提案: Good to mention a specific park and friends' impressions. Improve by correcting grammar ("impressed of" → "impressed by") and adding a short reason or plan when you might visit to make it more specific.

例: Yes, there is a park near my university that I haven't visited yet. My friends said they were impressed by the natural surroundings, so I plan to go there next weekend to see the walking trails and take photos.

× Yes, I still love going to the park and staying outside, but unfortunately I have not so much time going out due to studying and other activities I have to do.

✓ Yes, I still love going to the park and staying outside, but unfortunately I do not have much time to go out due to studying and other activities I have to do.

The sentence uses an incorrect present-tense construction 'have not so much time going out'. Correct phrasing is 'do not have much time to go out'. Use the auxiliary 'do' for negation with the verb 'have' in this context, use 'much' for uncountable noun 'time', and the infinitive 'to go out' rather than the -ing form after 'time' in this structure. Suggestion: say 'I do not have much time to go out.'

× Yes, there is a park near my university and I haven't been there yet, but some of my friends went there and they were really impressed of the nature and the surrounding areas.

✓ Yes, there is a park near my university and I haven't been there yet, but some of my friends went there and they were really impressed by the nature and the surrounding areas.

The phrase 'impressed of' is incorrect. The correct preposition with 'impressed' is 'by' (impressed by something). This error concerns the verb phrase and correct preposition use. Suggestion: use 'impressed by the nature' or better 'impressed by the scenery' for natural English.

× I liked the nature and I loved being outside and playing with friends and enjoying umm, the weather.

✓ I liked nature and I loved being outside, playing with friends, and enjoying the weather.

The original uses the article 'the' with 'nature' unnecessarily and has a slightly awkward list with repeated conjunctions. 'Nature' generally does not need 'the' when speaking generally. Also streamline parallel gerunds: 'being outside, playing, and enjoying'. Suggestion: remove 'the' before 'nature' and keep parallel structure.

× I think so, but I do not think that my city has so many parks.

✓ I think so, but I do not think that my city has many parks.

The phrase 'has so many parks' is grammatical but slightly odd in negative context; 'has many parks' is the normal collocation after 'do not think that'. This addresses usage choice in third-person singular 'has' which is correct; change improves naturalness. Suggestion: say 'has many parks' or 'has as many parks' depending on context.