Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сформулируйте ответ яснее и в прошедшем времени для соответствия вопросу, избегайте повторов и лишних слов. Начните с краткого топик‑предложения в прошедшем времени, затем приведите одно-два конкретных примера (где вы играли, с кем и что любили делать). Также обратите внимание на артикли и порядок слов (например, "with my family" вместо "my family members").

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my parents and siblings to play on the swings and have picnics, which I always enjoyed because we spent a lot of time together.

提案: Ответ должен быть более развёрнутым и естественным: прямо подтвердите текущее отношение и приведите причину или пример. Избегайте ссылок на предыдущие части ответа («I said it...»), лучше повторить кратко свою мысль и добавить конкретику. Используйте настоящее простое время для привычек.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually visit them at weekends to exercise or relax with friends because the green space helps me unwind from work.

提案: Дайте ясный прямой ответ на вопрос и объясните причину, используя связующие слова (for example, because, so). Избегайте слова «see every park» — лучше сказать «there are only a few parks». Уберите лишние паузы и повторы, используйте 2–3 предложения максимум.

例: Not really, because my city is small and there are only two parks. I visit them both regularly, so I don't feel we urgently need more parks, although a new playground would be nice.

提案: Используйте правильную лексику и грамматику при говорении о желаниях и планах (например, "I have always wanted to visit Disneyland in Paris"). Избегайте ошибок в глаголах и фразах («have eaten» неверно) и сформулируйте причину, почему это важно. Дайте завершённое предложение, избегая недосказанности.

例: Yes, I have always wanted to visit Disneyland in Paris. It was my childhood dream because I loved the films and characters, and I think visiting there would be a magical experience.

× Yes, actually. I like going to parks as a child and still I like visiting parks with my family members or my with my friends.

✓ Yes, actually. I liked going to parks as a child, and I still like visiting parks with my family members or my friends.

The student mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. 'As a child' refers to the past, so the verb should be in the past tense: 'liked'. The phrase 'still I like' is awkward in English; use 'I still like'. Also remove the extra 'my' before 'friends'. Suggestion: match the tense to the time expression and keep sentence word order natural.

× Yeah, of course. I actually say it in the first part of speech.

✓ Yeah, of course. I actually said it in the first part of the speaking test.

The student uses present tense 'say' but refers to a past action — what they already said in an earlier part of the test — so use past tense 'said'. 'First part of speech' is unnatural; use 'first part of the speaking test' for clarity.

× Actually, I see every park in my city because it's not too much parks.

✓ Actually, I have seen every park in my city because there are not many parks.

The student uses present simple 'see' when referring to a past or experiential action; 'have seen' (present perfect) is appropriate if experience up to now is meant. 'It's not too much parks' is ungrammatical: use 'there are not many parks' to express quantity. Also 'too much' is used with uncountable nouns; use 'many' with countable nouns like 'parks'.

× My umm, my town, my city is small and because of this we have two parks and I visit them actually.

✓ My town is small, and because of this we have only two parks, which I visit regularly.

The original sentence has unnecessary repetitions ('my umm, my town, my city') and awkward placement of 'actually'. Combine ideas concisely: state that the town is small, that there are only two parks, and that the speaker visits them regularly. Use 'only two parks' to indicate small number and 'regularly' or 'often' instead of 'actually'.

× Yeah, I have eaten Disneyland in Paris, which I want to visit in the future because it's my dreams to my childhood.

✓ I have seen pictures of Disneyland in Paris, which I want to visit in the future because it has been a dream since my childhood.

'Have eaten Disneyland' is incorrect: 'eat' is not used with places. Use 'seen' or 'visited' depending on meaning; if they mean experienced images, 'seen pictures' works. Also 'it's my dreams to my childhood' is ungrammatical; use 'it has been a dream since my childhood' to express a long-held desire. Use present perfect 'has been' to show the dream started in the past and continues now.

× I dream about it and I think it would.

✓ I dream about it, and I think I will go there one day.

The clause 'I think it would' is incomplete and unclear. 'Would' needs a main clause or context; to express future intention or expectation, use 'I think I will go there one day.' Make sure modal verbs are used with clear meaning and a complete clause.