Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve fluency and accuracy: remove filler repetitions, use correct tense and articles, and give a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific details. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Use linking words like “because” or “and” sparingly and purposefully.

例: Yes. I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they helped me relax. My parents often took me there, and I liked playing on the swings and feeding ducks by the pond.

提案: Correct grammar and reduce repetition: use a clear topic sentence and correct structures (e.g., “It depends on whether I have time”). Combine sentences to avoid redundancy and add a specific example of when you go to parks. Use linking words like “because” or “although” to connect ideas.

例: I still like going to parks, but it depends on whether I have time. Because I work and study English most days, I usually only visit parks at weekends to relax and take a short walk.

提案: Improve grammar and specificity: use correct infinitive forms (e.g., “to go to a park”) and avoid repeating phrases. Provide one specific reason or example (e.g., exercise, meeting friends) and use a linking word like “so” or “because.”

例: Yes, I would. I think more parks would improve people's health and give us places to meet friends. For example, my friends and I often go to a nearby park to walk and chat on weekends.

提案: Fix grammar and details: remove repetitions, use correct verbs and plurals (“it has many beautiful buildings” and “many cute children”), and explain why those features appeal to you. Add one specific activity you plan to do there.

例: I want to visit the park in the city centre because it has many beautiful buildings and lively areas. I especially want to go there to take photos of the architecture and watch families with children playing.

× Yes, I definitely like like going to park as I was a child because I think it can make me more relaxed.

✓ Yes, I definitely liked going to the park when I was a child because I think it made me more relaxed.

The speaker refers to a past habit, so past tense 'liked' and 'was' should be used rather than present 'like'. Also 'going to park' needs the definite article 'the park' for a specific place. Use 'made' to match past time frame. Suggestion: use past simple for past routines and include articles before countable singular nouns.

× And my mom and my father usually take me to the park and do some do some things that I like.

✓ My mom and my father usually took me to the park and did some things that I liked.

This sentence describes past habitual actions, so pronouns are fine but verbs must be in past tense to match time reference. Remove repeated phrase 'do some'. Use past simple 'took' and 'did' and change 'like' to 'liked'. Suggestion: keep verb tense consistent with past time frame and avoid repetition.

× And yes, so I'm I'm, I'm very like going to park as a child.

✓ Yes, I really liked going to the park as a child.

Original has fragmented structure and incorrect present 'I'm' with 'as a child' (past). Use a clear past-statement 'I really liked' and include article 'the'. Suggestion: form a simple past sentence for past preferences and avoid filler repetition.

× Uh-huh. Actually is depends on if I have the time, because now I'm very busy in my daily life.

✓ Actually it depends on whether I have the time, because now I'm very busy with my daily life.

Use present simple 'depends' with subject 'it'. 'Is depends' is incorrect. Use 'whether' rather than 'if' for clarity in this context and 'busy with' is the correct preposition. Suggestion: use 'it depends' and correct preposition 'busy with'.

× I need to work and I I need to study English, so I don't have time to go to the park.

✓ I need to work and I need to study English, so I don't have time to go to the park.

Main issue is repetition 'I I'. Remove the duplicate. Tense and structure are otherwise appropriate. Suggestion: avoid filler repetitions in spoken sentences.

× But actually I like, I like going to the park.

✓ But actually I like going to the park.

Repeated 'I like' is redundant; present tense is fine because this refers to a current preference. Suggestion: streamline by removing repetition.

× Yeah, sure. I'd like to see more parks in my city because I think go to a park is very important for me.

✓ Yeah, sure. I'd like to see more parks in my city because I think going to a park is very important for me.

Use gerund 'going' after 'think' when referring to an activity as a noun. 'Go to a park' needs to be 'going to a park'. Suggestion: use verb+ -ing to nominalize actions as subjects or objects.

× It can make me relax.

✓ It can help me relax.

'Make me relax' is understandable but 'help me relax' is more natural. 'Make me relaxed' or 'help me relax' are correct alternatives. Suggestion: use 'help me relax' to express the effect.

× And I very like park so much.

✓ And I like parks very much.

Word order and word choice incorrect: 'I very like' is not grammatical in English. Use verb 'like' with adverb 'very much' after the verb, and plural 'parks' if speaking generally. Suggestion: use 'I like parks very much' for general preference.

× I and I always hang out with my friend and my friend always like go to the park.

✓ I always hang out with my friends and my friends always like to go to the park.

Pronoun/noun number and verb forms are inconsistent. Use plural 'friends' if referring to more than one, and 'like to go' or 'like going' for habitual action. Remove duplicate 'I and I'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and correct infinitive/gerund after 'like'.

× I want to go to the the the park in the center of my city because it have so many beautiful buildings and it have so many cute child.

✓ I want to go to the park in the center of my city because it has so many beautiful buildings and so many cute children.

Remove repeated 'the'. Use singular 'the park' correctly. 'It have' is subject-verb disagreement; use 'it has'. 'Child' should be plural 'children' when referring to many. Suggestion: watch for article repetition, use correct verb form for singular subjects, and pluralize countable nouns when appropriate.

× I like child very much.

✓ I like children very much.

Use plural 'children' when expressing a general liking. Word order 'like children very much' is correct. Suggestion: pluralize nouns when speaking generally about a group.