Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Работайте над беглостью и связностью ответа: избегайте повторов и заполнителей (umm, uh). Начните с чёткого топик‑предложения, затем добавьте одно‑два конкретных подробных предложения (например, что вы делали в парке и с кем). Используйте связки (for example, because, so) и следите за грамматикой (Past tense — «liked», «made»). Практикуйте короткие структурированные ответы до 4–5 предложений.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played on the swings and had picnics there with my parents, which made happy memories. Because the parks were quiet and green, they helped me relax after school. For example, I remember watching the sunset with my family on warm evenings.

提案: Улучшите точность времени и структуру: используйте правильные времена (past vs present). Дайте прямой ответ («Yes» или «No»), затем объяснение с конкретикой (как часто сейчас и почему). Избегайте незавершённых фраз и повторов. Добавьте связку (however, but, although) и одну конкретную деталь о будущем плане.

例: I still like parks, but I don't visit them as often now. Currently I go only once or twice a month because of work commitments. However, I plan to make more time for parks in the future by going on weekend mornings to relax and exercise.

提案: Сформулируйте мнение ясно и подкрепите его причинами: начните с «Yes, I would» или «No, I wouldn't», затем укажите 2–3 конкретные причины, почему нужны современные парки (здоровье, отдых, экология). Используйте логические связки (because, so, therefore) и избегайте повторов слов.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for exercise and reduce air pollution. New, modern parks with playgrounds and walking paths would encourage families to spend time outdoors. Therefore, I think investing in parks would improve residents' health and wellbeing.

提案: Отвечайте конкретно на вопрос: назовите тип парка или конкретное место, которое вы хотите посетить, и объясните почему. Постройте ответ из 2–4 предложений, используя связки (for example, because, so) и корректную грамматику (future: "would like to visit", "will have"). Уберите ненужные повторения и говорите плавно.

例: In the future I'd like to visit a large, modern park with good sports facilities and walking trails. Such a park would be ideal for jogging and weekend picnics with friends. For example, I hope the city will build a riverside park with bike paths and outdoor gyms, so I can exercise and relax there.

× Actually, yes, umm, I go, I, I really like going to the park because uh, I feel tired and umm, when I go into the park, I feel refreshed and umm, and it makes great, uh, great memories and the.

✓ Actually, yes. I really like going to the park because when I go there I feel refreshed, and it creates great memories.

The student mixes simple present with irrelevant 'I go' repetitions and an incorrect phrase 'I feel tired' contradicting 'refreshed'. Use simple present to express habitual actions: 'I really like going' and 'when I go there I feel refreshed'. Remove fillers and repetitions for clarity. Use 'creates' for singular noun 'it' referring to the experience, and finish the sentence with a clear object 'great memories'.

× Actually, when I was a child, I love going to the park because it helps me relax and feel refreshed after a busy day.

✓ Actually, when I was a child, I loved going to the park because it helped me relax and feel refreshed after a busy day.

The sentence describes a past habitual action; verbs should be in the past tense. 'Was a child' signals past time, so use 'loved' and 'helped' not present 'love'/'helps'.

× No, but nowadays, uh, I don't every day go to the park because I don't have enough time go to the park.

✓ No. Nowadays I don't go to the park every day because I don't have enough time to go.

Word order and verb forms are incorrect. Use standard word order 'I don't go to the park every day'. Add infinitive marker 'to' before 'go'. Remove repeated phrase and fillers for clarity.

× Uh, but uh, in the future I hope I.

✓ But in the future I hope I will be able to go more often.

The original sentence is incomplete and misuses tense. To express future hope, use 'I hope I will' or 'I hope to'. Provide a complete idea: 'be able to go more often'.

× Actually, yes, I like I I see a more and modern modern parks in our city, our city.

✓ Actually, yes. I would like to see more modern parks in our city.

Word order and duplications are incorrect. Use 'more modern parks' (comparative) and 'see' should be 'would like to see' to express desire. Remove repetition 'our city' and duplicate words.

× When I if if build modern build modern park in our city, I use it.

✓ If a modern park were built in our city, I would use it.

Conditional sentence is malformed. Use second conditional for hypothetical: 'If a modern park were built, I would use it.' Remove repeated words and incorrect verb forms.

× I love going to the park because because.

✓ I love going to the park because it is relaxing and enjoyable.

Sentence is incomplete and repeats 'because'. Provide a complete reason using present simple for general truth: 'it is relaxing and enjoyable'.

× I would I would say nowadays I going I go to the parks every month, but in the future I would like to see modern and will equipment parks and going to the spark because this offer a pleasant place to relax in the exercise if if the city buildings new parks, walking.

✓ I would say that nowadays I go to the parks every month, but in the future I would like to see modern parks with good equipment because they would offer pleasant places to relax and exercise if the city builds new parks, such as walking areas.

Multiple tense and structure errors. Use present simple 'I go' for regular actions. Use 'would like' for future desire. 'Will equipment' is wrong; use 'with good equipment'. Match verbs and subjects: 'they would offer'. Use conditional 'if the city builds new parks'. Remove repetitions and clarify 'walking areas'.