Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence and then one or two specific supporting details. Use correct pronouns and past tense when talking about childhood. Keep it concise (1–3 sentences).

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they had a lot of playgrounds where I could play with my friends. For example, my best friend and I used to spend whole afternoons on the swings and slides.

提案: This answer is generally clear and relevant but needs small corrections for grammar and repetition. Remove duplicate words, use plural/singular consistently, and connect ideas with a linking phrase. Keep within 3–4 sentences. Add a brief reason or result to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are peaceful and help me relax after work. I often walk there with my friends, and we like to sit on a bench under the trees to talk and unwind.

提案: Answer directly with a clear opinion, use correct grammar and refer to places with appropriate pronouns (it, they). Provide one specific reason and an example. Avoid unclear abbreviations and irrelevant fragments.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and provide places for people to exercise. For instance, the Botanical Garden is a great model because it has walking paths, playgrounds and seasonal events.

提案: State the park you want to visit clearly and use future tense correctly. Give one or two specific details about what appeals to you and why. Keep sentences grammatical and concise.

例: Yes, I would like to visit Kew Gardens in London in the future because it has impressive glasshouses, waterfalls and large tree-lined paths. I think my family and friends would enjoy the botanical collections and outdoor activities there.

× Yes, I like going to park as a child because she is planning playing for many games and my best friend for parks.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because I planned to play many games and my best friend and I went to parks together.

Errors: incorrect tense (present used for past), singular/plural ('park' vs 'parks'), incorrect pronoun 'she' and wrong structures 'is planning playing' and 'for parks'. Suggestion: use past tense 'liked' for childhood, plural 'parks', replace 'she' with appropriate subject 'I', use simple past 'planned to play' or 'used to play', and rephrase to 'my best friend and I went to parks together' for clarity.

× Yes, I still enjoy enjoy going to park because they are peaceful and good for a relaxing after work.

✓ Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are peaceful and good for relaxing after work.

Errors: repeated word 'enjoy', singular 'park' should be plural 'parks', article misuse 'a relaxing' should be 'relaxing' as a gerund. Suggestion: remove duplicate word, use plural when speaking generally, and use 'good for relaxing' or 'good for a relaxing time'.

× I often walk there with my best friends and we like to sit on a bench under the trees and talk.

✓ I often walk there with my best friend and we like to sit on a bench under the trees and talk.

Error: mismatch in number between 'my best friends' and 'we' phrasing; if speaker means one friend, use 'my best friend'; if plural, adjust verb forms and articles. Suggestion: choose singular 'best friend' to match 'a bench' and keep sentence concise.

× I like to more parks in city but I like UH.

✓ I would like to have more parks in the city, but I like UH.

Errors: incorrect structure 'I like to more parks' should be 'I would like to have more parks' to express desire, missing article 'the' before 'city'. Suggestion: use 'would like' for wishes and include definite article 'the city'. Note: 'UH' preserved but unclear; if it is a place name, keep capitalisation.

× I like Botanical Garden.

✓ I like the Botanical Garden.

Error: missing definite article before a specific place name 'Botanical Garden'. Suggestion: use 'the' when referring to a particular garden.

× She is very unique and fresh her with many activities and games.

✓ It is very unique and fresh, with many activities and games.

Errors: incorrect pronoun 'She' used for a garden (use 'it'), odd phrase 'fresh her' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use 'it is' for places, and 'fresh, with many activities' to describe atmosphere and available options.

× I go to in future visit of London.

✓ I will go to London in the future.

Errors: incorrect word order and tense. Suggestion: use 'will' + base verb for future plans and correct order 'go to London in the future'.

× This garden was a waterfall and many trees and many activities for my families and friends enjoy.

✓ This garden has a waterfall, many trees, and many activities for my family and friends to enjoy.

Errors: wrong tense 'was' (should be 'has' to describe features), awkward noun 'families' should be singular 'family' if referring to speaker's family, missing infinitive 'to enjoy'. Suggestion: use present tense 'has' for describing a place, use 'my family and friends' and include 'to' before 'enjoy'.