Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời chưa rõ ràng và nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp từ vựng gây khó hiểu. Hãy mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi, sau đó nêu 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (thời gian, hoạt động, với ai) và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Sửa lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ "go to bath" → "went to the park", "fly on sweet and shine" có thể là "fly kites" hoặc "play on swings"). Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu để tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went in the afternoon with my family and friends, and we usually played on the swings or flew kites. Those visits were fun because we spent time together and I got fresh air.

提案: Ý chính bị rối và nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp khiến câu khó hiểu. Trả lời nên bắt đầu trực tiếp (Yes/No), giải thích lý do rõ ràng với cấu trúc ngắn gọn và dùng liên từ. Chú ý thì động từ (have/has), danh từ (assessments, homework), và diễn đạt thời gian/khó khăn (not enough time).

例: Not really. I don't have much time to visit parks now because I have a lot of school assessments and homework, so I usually spend my free time studying instead.

提案: Câu trả lời không mạch lạc và nhiều lỗi cú pháp/văn phạm. Nên trả lời trực tiếp (Yes), nêu lí do cụ thể (ví dụ: crowded, lack of green space), mô tả lợi ích và kết thúc bằng một câu liên kết. Tránh lặp từ và sắp xếp ý theo thứ tự rõ ràng.

例: Yes, I would. Our city needs more parks, especially in the central areas where there are many busy streets. More parks would give people places to relax, exercise, and escape the noise of traffic.

提案: Ý cơ bản tốt nhưng có lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp. Nên bắt đầu trực tiếp, nêu tên hoặc loại công viên nếu có (ví dụ: a quiet park or a botanical garden), giải thích vì sao cụ thể (relaxation, meet friends), và nói về kế hoạch (when/who). Sử dụng thì tương lai đơn cho dự định (will/would/plan to).

例: Yes, I would like to visit a quiet park or a botanical garden in the future because it helps me feel refreshed after a long day at school. I plan to go there with my friends on weekends to relax and chat.

× Absolutely yes. I enjoy going to bath at 2.

✓ Absolutely yes. I enjoyed going to the park when I was a child.

The student used present tense 'enjoy' and incorrect noun 'bath' and time 'at 2' which do not fit the past context of the question. Use past tense 'enjoyed' for a habitual childhood activity and correct 'bath' to 'the park'. Also remove the unclear time 'at 2' or replace with a clear phrase if needed.

× I usually go to to park to fly on sweet and shine with my family and my friend.

✓ I usually went to the park to play on the swings and slides with my family and my friends.

The sentence has repetition ('to to'), wrong verbs ('fly on sweet and shine'), incorrect singular/plural ('my friend'). The intended idea is past habitual action: use past 'went', correct nouns 'swings and slides', and plural 'friends' if more than one. Ensure proper word order: 'went to the park to play on the swings and slides with my family and my friends.'

× Umm I cry a little going to the park because I has a hated assessment in school and PC for daylight so I don't have enough time to go to the park.

✓ Umm I feel a little upset about going to the park because I had a difficult exam at school and had to use the computer during the day, so I didn't have enough time to go to the park.

The sentence mixes tenses and uses incorrect verbs: 'cry' should be 'feel upset' for intent, 'has' should be 'had', 'hated assessment' is wrong collocation => 'difficult exam', 'PC for daylight' unclear => 'had to use the computer during the day'. Maintain past tense to match the context and correct collocations and word order.

× Absolutely yes, I see very park in my city on I in the in the central the bus have people enjoy help people relax and.

✓ Absolutely yes, there are many parks in my city. In the central area, the parks near the bus stations have many people; they help people relax and enjoy themselves.

The original has serious structure and article errors and misplaced words. Use 'there are' to state existence, correct 'very park' to 'many parks', clarify location 'central area', and split into sentences for clarity. Use 'help people relax and enjoy themselves' for natural phrasing.

× Of course I want to go park in the future because I think it makes me feel refreshed and glam a smile after a long day at school. I think I go to with my friend.

✓ Of course I want to go to the park in the future because I think it will make me feel refreshed and put a smile on my face after a long day at school. I think I will go with my friends.

Use future tense 'will make' and 'will go' for future intentions. Add missing preposition 'to the park', correct collocation 'put a smile on my face' instead of 'glam a smile', and plural 'friends' if referring to more than one. Ensure proper auxiliary 'will' for future statements.