Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, more natural and slightly expanded with one supporting detail. Begin with a clear topic sentence, fix tense and article usage, and add a brief reason or memory. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks when I was a child. I often went with my parents and remember playing on the swings and having picnics, which made those visits very fun.

提案: Make sentences grammatically correct and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to add specific supporting details (who you go with and what you do). Limit to up to five sentences and vary vocabulary (enjoy, relax, play sports).

例: Yes, I still like going to parks because they help me relax and have fun. I usually go with my family or friends, and we often play football or have a picnic, which makes the visits enjoyable.

提案: Respond directly and clearly; fix grammar and avoid awkward phrasing. Provide a reason and a brief opinion about why more parks would be good. Use linking words (however, because) to make it coherent and specific.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for exercise and family outings. However, I have already visited most parks nearby, so new parks would give us fresh places to explore.

提案: Make the reply grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence about future plans, then give specific reasons and mention who you would go with. Avoid tentative or broken sentences; use correct conditional structure (If a new park opens, I will...).

例: Yes. If a new park opens in my city or town, I would definitely visit it with my family or friends because I enjoy the lush greenery and playing outdoor games there.

× Yes, I liked to go to park when I was child.

✓ Yes, I liked to go to the park when I was a child.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'park' and missing indefinite article 'a' before 'child'. 'Go to the park' is the usual collocation. 'a child' is required for countable singular noun. Suggestion: include appropriate articles for singular countable nouns: 'the park', 'a child'.

× Yes, still like going to park because when I go to park, I enjoy there a lot.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park because when I go to the park, I enjoy it a lot.

Missing subject 'I' at sentence start and missing articles 'the' before 'park'. 'Enjoy there' is incorrect: use object pronoun 'it' to refer to the park and place adverb 'there' is unnecessary. Suggestion: include subject, use 'the park', and use 'enjoy it a lot'.

× I I play games a lot.

✓ I play games a lot.

Duplicate pronoun 'I I' is a typing/repetition error causing sentence structure problem. Remove the extra 'I'.

× I, I go to the park with my family, with my friends and I enjoy it.

✓ I go to the park with my family and my friends, and I enjoy it.

Duplicate 'I' again and punctuation/coordination issues. Use 'my friends' with article 'my' and join phrases with 'and'. Suggestion: remove duplicate 'I' and structure the list clearly.

× Yes, I like to see more parks, but I think I visited every park in my city so now I don't have any new park to visit it.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks, but I think I have visited every park in my city, so now I don't have any new park to visit.

Tense and modal usage: 'I like to see' is better as 'I would like to see' for preference. 'I visited' should be present perfect 'I have visited' to indicate experience up to now. Extra pronoun 'it' at end is unnecessary. Suggestion: use 'would like' for polite wishes and present perfect for past experiences relevant to present.

× Yes, if is there any new part will open in my city or in my town?

✓ Yes, if there is any new park opening in my city or town,

Word order error 'if is there' is incorrect; should be 'if there is'. 'part' is typo for 'park'. 'Will open' in conditional with 'if' should be 'opening' or 'opens' depending on form; use 'opening' here to continue sentence. Suggestion: correct word order to 'if there is' and fix typo 'park'.

× My town I will visit and I will go with my friends or family because I really enjoy the lush greenery and I love play games.

✓ I will visit it and go with my friends or family because I really enjoy the lush greenery and I love to play games.

Awkward word order 'My town I will visit' should be 'I will visit my town' or 'I will visit it'. Use infinitive 'to play games' after 'love'. Suggestion: use natural subject-verb order and 'love to play' or 'love playing'.

× So if any new park would open I will.

✓ So if any new park opens, I will.

Conditional structure: do not use 'would' in the 'if' clause of a real future condition. Use present simple 'opens' in the 'if' clause and 'will' in main clause. Also sentence was incomplete; 'I will' implies 'visit it' but context allows leaving 'visit' implicit; full form: 'I will visit it.' Suggestion: use 'If a new park opens, I will (visit it).'