Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and grammatically consistent, use past tense throughout, shorten redundancy, and add a specific detail to support your reason. Use one strong topic sentence then 1–2 supporting details with linking words.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they had large playgrounds where I could climb and play with friends. For example, I remember spending afternoons on the swings and slides, and afterwards I would sit with my parents on a bench while watching other families and chatting with neighbors.

提案: Use present perfect or simple present correctly and be concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain the reason and add a specific example or frequency. Avoid repetitive phrases like 'already an adult' which are irrelevant.

例: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks, but I rarely go because I work long hours. For instance, I usually only visit once a month on weekends to relax and get some fresh air.

提案: Answer directly and expand with a reason related to community benefit rather than personal time alone. Use linking words to connect ideas and give a specific suggestion about the type of parks you'd like.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because they provide green spaces for exercise and community events. For example, I think small neighborhood parks with walking paths and playgrounds would encourage families to spend more time outdoors.

提案: Good concise answer. Improve by adding a brief reason for each park and a time-frame to make the response more informative and natural. Use linking words for clarity.

例: Yes, I'd love to visit Rizal Park in Manila because of its historical monuments, and I want to revisit Burnham Park in Baguio for its lakes and cool climate. I hope to go to both within the next year when I have some vacation time.

× Back when I was a child, I'd like going to parks because I could play on the playground.

✓ Back when I was a child, I liked going to parks because I could play on the playground.

The original uses 'I'd like' which is a contraction of 'I would like' and is inappropriate for past habitual actions. Use the simple past 'liked' to describe past habits. Also 'like' followed by verb should be 'liked going' for past reference. Suggestion: use simple past for past routines (I liked going).

× I also enjoy sitting on a bench watching family, strolling around and sometimes talk with other people.

✓ I also enjoy sitting on a bench, watching families, strolling around and sometimes talking with other people.

After 'enjoy' verbs should be in -ing form. 'Watching family' should be plural 'families' or 'watching my family' depending on meaning. 'Talk' should be 'talking' to match parallel -ing forms. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use consistent -ing forms and plural where needed.

× I still like going to parks until now, but I'm already an adult and I'm currently working so I don't have time to visit the parks.

✓ I still like going to parks, but now that I'm an adult and currently working, I don't have time to visit them.

The phrase 'until now' is awkward with 'still'; use 'now' or 'still' alone. 'Visit the parks' can be shortened to 'visit them' to avoid repetition. Sentence structure improved with commas. Suggestion: use 'still' or 'now' and avoid redundant articles and repeated nouns.

× I would like to see more parks in our city, but since I'm currently working I don't have much time.

✓ I would like to see more parks in our city, but since I'm currently working, I don't have much time.

Main issue is punctuation: missing comma after dependent clause. Also 'would like' is correct for desire. Suggestion: place a comma after the introductory clause 'but since I'm currently working' for clarity.

× I'd like to go to Rizal Park in Manila and revisit the Burnham Park in Baguio.

✓ I'd like to go to Rizal Park in Manila and revisit Burnham Park in Baguio.

No major grammar error besides article: proper names of parks typically do not need the definite article 'the' unless part of the official name. Removing 'the' before 'Burnham Park' is more natural. Suggestion: use official park names without 'the' unless required.