Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, use correct verb forms and simple vocabulary, and add one or two brief supporting details. Avoid long pauses and hesitations. For example, say you didn’t enjoy parks and give reasons (e.g., preferred indoor activities like drawing, helping at home).

例: Not really. I didn’t like going to parks when I was a child because I preferred indoor activities like drawing and helping my parents at home. I usually spent most of my free time working on crafts or doing household chores, so I had little interest in outdoor play.

提案: Answer directly and organize reasons with linking words. Use correct nouns and grammar (park/parks, interested). Give one specific reason and a short example. Keep it within 2–3 sentences to be natural and concise.

例: I feel so-so about parks now. I find many parks a bit boring and noisy, and they are often crowded with older visitors, so I prefer quieter places like cafés or nature trails for relaxation.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (because, for example, therefore). Use correct phrases (improve the environment) and avoid repetition. Mention a concrete benefit such as cleaner air or recreational space.

例: Yes, I would. Parks improve the city’s environment and provide green space for exercise and relaxation, so I think having more parks would make the city healthier and more pleasant to live in.

提案: Answer briefly and correctly name the place. Use clear reasons and a short example of what you want to do there. Avoid unclear words (poison view, pity). Use linking words like because or to + verb to explain purpose.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the national park in the future because it looks very beautiful and full of natural scenery. I would like to go hiking there and take photographs of the landscapes and wildlife.

× Not really. I'm not really go to the part where I was a childhood because in my time of the kid I always do my own parting about, uh, drawing and labouring at home.

✓ Not really. I didn't really go to the park when I was a child because when I was a kid I always did my own activities, like drawing and doing chores at home.

Errors: incorrect present tense 'I'm not really go' and awkward time expressions. Type: present tense and past tense usage. Use past tense 'didn't really go' and 'when I was a child/kid' for past habitual actions. Replace 'part' with 'park' and 'parting about' with 'activities' and 'labouring' with 'doing chores' for correct word choice and clarity.

× Just so so because part is not really interest me, the part is. So boring and so many older people at there and it's really, uh, noisy there, so I don't like to go to park.

✓ Just so-so because parks don't really interest me. They are so boring, there are so many older people there, and it's really noisy, so I don't like to go to the park.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and tense: 'part is not really interest me' should be 'parks don't really interest me' (present simple negative). Use plural 'parks' or 'the park' consistently. 'At there' is incorrect preposition; use 'there'. Add articles: 'go to the park.' Fix word order and punctuation for clarity.

× Yes of course, although I don't like pub but park is a really nice for cities.

✓ Yes, of course. Although I don't like pubs, parks are really nice for cities.

Errors: singular/plural and article usage. Use plural 'pubs' and 'parks are' with subject-verb agreement. Remove incorrect 'a' before 'really nice' when referring to plural; use 'for cities' to indicate general benefit.

× Environments improve the environment, so the park is the nice thing for our city.

✓ Parks improve the environment, so a park is a nice thing for our city.

Errors: word choice and article use. 'Environments' is incorrect; 'parks' is intended. Use singular 'a park' if referring generally to one, or keep plural 'parks' consistently. 'the nice thing' -> 'a nice thing' for general statement.

× So I like the more park in the city.

✓ So I would like more parks in the city.

Errors: singular/plural and word order. 'the more park' is incorrect; use 'more parks' and modal 'would like' to express desire. Place 'in the city' after noun for natural order.

× Yes, of course, in my poison view, I will go to visit the National Park.

✓ Yes, of course. In my opinion, I will visit the national park.

Errors: wrong word 'poison' should be 'opinion' (lexical error). 'go to visit' is redundant; 'visit' suffices. Capitalization: 'national park' can be lowercased unless it is a proper name; if it is a specific park name, use the proper name.

× That level part is really beautiful, really pity for me and the environment, and it's really nice, so I like to go there.

✓ That natural area is really beautiful and a pity that I haven't been there yet; it is good for the environment, so I would like to go there.

Errors: unclear phrases 'level part' and 'really pity for me' are incorrect word choices. Replace with clear nouns like 'natural area' or 'that park' and express regret with 'a pity that I haven't been there yet.' Clarify environmental benefit and use 'would like to go there' to express future desire.