Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并注意时态与句式简洁。尽量用一到两句话点明观点，再用一到两句具体例子支持。避免重复词（如兩次使用 encounter），並修正语法（例如过去时态和冠词）。

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were peaceful and full of nature. For example, there was a small park near my home where I often watched birds and played with squirrels, which made me feel calm and happy.

提案: 回答要更自然且避免多余信息（比如“I'm just a teenager”与问题无关）。用一個主句表明喜好，然後用具體原因和連接詞來支持，注意词语搭配（'relax' 不需要 'myself'，'therapeutic' 用法不当）。

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax and clear my mind. For instance, I often read or listen to music on a park bench, which makes me feel much less stressed.

提案: 語句要更精簡並注意語法與搭配（如 'there lacks parks' 應為 'there are few parks' 或 'the city lacks parks'；'a atmosphere' 改為 'an atmosphere'）。先給出立場，再用具體原因支持，例如健康或社交功能。

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because it is crowded and lacks green spaces. More parks would improve air quality and provide places for people to exercise and relax.

提案: 回答要避免重複（例如重複提到 'pine trees' 及 'National Forest park'），注意時態一致與用詞（'encounter with' 改為 'encounter' 或 'see'；'pick some mushrooms' 若不常見應小心表述）。用一到兩句說明原因和具體活動。

例: I would like to visit the National Forest Park because I enjoy pine forests and wildlife. For example, I hope to walk among the trees, watch squirrels, and take photographs of the scenery, which I find very relaxing.

× Definitely, I can experience a tranquil time in parks and also it's the only opportunity that I can encounter with nature and encounter with animals.

✓ Definitely. I could have tranquil times in parks, and it was the only opportunity for me to encounter nature and animals.

原句中“encounter with”用法不正确，英语中通常用“encounter”直接跟宾语（encounter nature/animals）而不是“encounter with”。另外，句子时态与提问“Did you like going to parks as a child?”（过去）不一致，需使用过去式或情态动词的过去含义（could/have）。将“a tranquil time”改为复数“tranquil times”更自然。建议使用过去时或过去习惯表达如“could have”或“used to”来表达童年时的经常性行为。

× Also, it's very easy for me to go to park because it's just near my home.

✓ Also, it was very easy for me to go to the park because it was just near my home.

提问为过去时间，故需将动词改为过去式（is → was）。另外，英语中通常在表示特定地点时在“park”前加定冠词“the”。因此应为“go to the park”。建议注意时态一致性并正确使用定冠词。

× I'm just a teenager now, so I still like going to parks now because I think it's a good way for me to relax myself and make me feel therapeutic.

✓ I'm just a teenager now, so I still like going to parks because I think it's a good way for me to relax and it makes me feel refreshed.

原句中存在冗余的“now”和不自然的短语“relax myself”以及“make me feel therapeutic”。英文中通常直接说“relax”而不用反身代词；“therapeutic”是形容词，不可直接用于“make me feel therapeutic”来表达“让我感觉治愈/放松”，更自然的表达是“it makes me feel refreshed”或“it is therapeutic”。建议删除多余的“now”，使用自然搭配。

× Definitely, my city is quite complex and very busy which is a modern city but there lacks parks and a lot of nature scenery.

✓ Definitely. My city is quite modern and very busy, but it lacks parks and much natural scenery.

原句结构混乱，重复表述“is quite complex and very busy which is a modern city”不自然，应简化为“quite modern and very busy”。“there lacks parks”是错误结构，应改为“it lacks parks”。“a lot of nature scenery”搭配不当，改为“much natural scenery”。建议注意主语一致和自然的名词搭配。

× So I think there need to establish more parks to build a atmosphere of nature.

✓ So I think we need to establish more parks to create an atmosphere of nature.

原句“there need to establish”语序和主语缺失，应用“we need to establish”或“It is necessary to establish”。此外，“a atmosphere”冠词使用错误，应为“an atmosphere”。“build an atmosphere”搭配较弱，常用“create an atmosphere”。建议注意主语和动词的一致、冠词用法以及常见搭配。

× I'd like to go to the National Forest Park because I always like pine trees and a National Forest park.

✓ I'd like to go to the National Forest Park because I have always liked pine trees and national forests.

句中时态需与“Would you like to go”类未来愿望相符，可用现在完成时表喜好延续（have always liked）。重复出现“A National Forest park”既冗余又大小写不当，应改为“national forests”或“the National Forest Park”。建议避免重复并使用正确的名词形式与大小写。

× There are a lot of pine trees and also I can encounter with a lot of animals like squirrels and I can pick some mushrooms there.

✓ There are a lot of pine trees, and I could encounter many animals like squirrels and pick some mushrooms there.

同样“encounter with”用法不当，应为“encounter animals”。句子中时态与愿望/将来计划相关，使用“could”或“would be able to”更合适。使用“many”比“a lot of”在书面中更简洁。建议改用正确的动词搭配并注意时态和连词使用。

× I think it was quite delighted and healing.

✓ I think it would be quite delightful and healing.

原句“it was quite delighted”中“delighted”是用来描述人的情感（be delighted），不能用来描述事物。应使用形容词“delightful”来描述体验或地方。此外，时态应表达将来愿望或可能性，故用“would be”。“healing”用作形容词可接受。建议选择合适的形容词形式并注意时态。