Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 在回答中注意時態一致性、單數複數和冠詞，並儘量組織成一個主題句加一兩個支持細節。避免重複詞和語氣詞（如 uh、umm）。例如可以以“是的，我喜歡...”開始，然後用連接詞描述活動和頻率。

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my friends, and we usually rode our bikes and played football there every weekend.

提案: 回答要更具體說明原因，使用連接詞（because, so, which）並給出具體例子。去掉填充詞並把句子合併成不超過五句的簡潔回答。

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax after a busy day. For example, I often sit on a bench to read or take a short walk to clear my mind.

提案: 避免使用“adjective”或不完整表達，要具體說明公園的好處（如 improve air quality, offer recreational space）。用完整句給出具體例子並使用連接詞支撐。

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and provide spaces for recreation. For example, people could exercise, walk their dogs, or have family picnics there.

提案: 提升句子流暢性並避免重複。具體提到想去的公園類型或城市並說明原因（例如特色景觀、設施或文化體驗）。使用一到兩個支持細節來豐富回答。

例: Definitely. I want to visit parks in other cities to see different features, such as botanical gardens or urban parks with sculptures. For instance, I would love to visit a seaside park for its views and a large city park for its cycling paths.

× Yeah, when I was a kid, I like to go to park with my friend and we often ride a bike and play the football.

✓ Yeah, when I was a kid, I liked to go to the park with my friends and we often rode bikes and played football.

这是一般过去时的叙述（描述童年习惯），动词应使用过去式：like → liked；ride → rode；play → played。此外，名词可数形式和冠词需调整：go to park 应为 go to the park；friend 应为复数 friends（与 we 一致）；ride a bike 可改为复数形式 rode bikes 或 rode a bike（与上下文一致），play the football 中的定冠词可以省略或改为 play football。建议在叙述过去习惯时统一使用过去时并注意可数名词与冠词。

× Well, to be honest, my answer is yes. Uh, because going to park, uh, I can enjoy my life and I feel comfortable.

✓ Well, to be honest, my answer is yes. Because going to the park, I can enjoy my life and I feel comfortable.

句子描述现在的感受，主句用一般现在时是正确，但名词和冠词错误：going to park 应为 going to the park（固定搭配，表示去公园这件事）。去掉多余的语气词，使句子更流畅。保持动词时态为现在时即可。

× Uh, yes, I would like to see more parks in my city 'cause they can, uh, adjective and they help people benefit. For example, uh, we can do exercise in the park or umm.

✓ Uh, yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they are beautiful/useful and they help people. For example, we can exercise in the park.

原句中用法不当：they can, uh, adjective 不是正确结构，形容词不能直接跟在 can 之后；另外 help people benefit 用法不自然，通常说 help people 或 benefit people。建议用 be + 形容词（they are beautiful/useful）描述公园的特征，并简化 help 表达。去掉多余填充词，exercise用作动词不需 do exercise in the park 可以直接说 exercise in the park 或 do exercise，两者皆可。

× I definitely, I want to go to different park in my future, uh, and I want to go to different parking, different city, uh, 'cause I, I can see different park with different feature.

✓ I definitely want to go to different parks in the future, and I want to go to different cities, because I can see parks with different features.

涉及将来计划，应使用一般现在/将来表达（此处使用 want to + 动词已可）。需要修正名词单复数和词序：different park → different parks；in my future 常用 in the future；different parking 意义不明，应为 different cities；see different park → see parks with different features（复数形式且特征为名词 features）。另外去掉重复的 I，简化语句以提高自然度。

× we often ride a bike and play the football.

✓ we often rode bikes and played football.

句中描述过去习惯，应使用过去式（rode, played）。同时 a bike 与复数主语 we 更自然的搭配为 bikes（或 each rode a bike）；the football 中的定冠词通常可省略，直接说 play football。注意主谓一致与可数名词单复数的搭配。