Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and grammatically accurate by fixing articles, plural forms, and concise phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often went with my brother to a small park near our house, where we played hide-and-seek and football. Those outings are some of my fondest childhood memories.

提案: Reduce hesitations and fix grammar (articles, word choice). Give a concise topic sentence, then one clear reason with a linking word. Replace fillers with a smooth phrase. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. After work I usually visit a nearby park because it helps me relax and feel refreshed.

提案: Be concise and avoid repetition. Answer directly, then provide one specific reason with a linking word. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and complete the final thought. Use concrete examples of activities.

例: Not really, because there are already many parks in my area. For example, these green spaces provide places for exercise, walking dogs, and short family picnics, so residents' needs are generally met.

提案: Make the answer complete and more natural by polishing tense and ending the sentence. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give specific details (when, why) using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases.

例: Yes, there is one park on my wishlist that a coworker recommended. It's near my workplace, so I plan to visit next week for a short walk because being near green spaces helps me relax.

× Yes, I loved going to park when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I loved going to the park when I was a child.

This sentence needs the definite article 'the' because 'park' refers to a specific place type that is generally known in context; English requires 'the' before singular countable nouns when they are specific or previously understood.

× I used to go to a park nearby my home with my brother and we loved playing hide and seek and football over there.

✓ I used to go to a park near my home with my brother, and we loved playing hide-and-seek and football there.

Use 'near' rather than 'nearby' before a noun phrase ('nearby my home' is awkward); 'nearby' is usually an adverb. Add a comma before 'and' for clarity. 'Over there' is redundant; 'there' is sufficient. Also hyphenate 'hide-and-seek' as a compound noun.

× It's one of the memorable thing from my childhood.

✓ It's one of the most memorable things from my childhood.

'Memorable' needs comparison and plural: 'one of the ... things' requires plural 'things' and to express degree use 'most memorable'. Also include 'the' before the superlative structure.

× Yes, I still love going to park as an adult.

✓ Yes, I still love going to the park as an adult.

Same article issue as before: singular countable noun 'park' requires 'the' when referring to parks in general experience or a specific park.

× Whenever I get back from work, I spend some time in a park nearby my suburb.

✓ Whenever I get back from work, I spend some time in a park near my suburb.

Use 'near' before a noun phrase; 'nearby my suburb' is not natural. Sentence structure improved by keeping 'a park near my suburb.'

× Uh, I find my I, I I.

✓ Uh, I find myself...

This appears to be hesitating speech; grammatically the correct reflexive pronoun is 'myself' after 'find'. The original contains repetitions and incomplete words.

× It feels relaxed, relaxing and refreshed whenever I spend my time over there.

✓ I feel relaxed and refreshed whenever I spend time there.

'It feels relaxed' is incorrect because feelings apply to a person, so use 'I feel'. 'Relaxing' is unnecessary here; use 'relaxed' (adjective describing person) and 'refreshed'. Remove 'over' in 'over there' and use 'there'.

× There are already plenty of parks in my country country where I I'm living right now so it's not a problem in a place where I am residing at the moment.

✓ There are already plenty of parks in the country where I am living right now, so it's not a problem where I am residing at the moment.

Remove duplicated 'country'. Use 'the country' when specifying the country you live in. Fix 'I I'm' to 'I am'. The second clause is redundant; simplify to avoid repetition.

× There are already lots of green spaces which meets residents requirements.

✓ There are already lots of green spaces which meet residents' requirements.

Use plural verb 'meet' to agree with plural subject 'green spaces' (subject-verb agreement but fits problem type 27 too); add possessive apostrophe 'residents'' and 'requirements' needs plural. Also 'which meet' is correct relative clause.

× They can have exercise and take their dogs for a short.

✓ They can exercise and take their dogs for a short walk.

'Have exercise' is unnatural; use 'exercise'. The phrase 'for a short' is incomplete; add the noun 'walk'.

× Yes, there is one park in my wish list that's recommended by my coworker.

✓ Yes, there is one park on my wish list that's been recommended by my coworker.

Use 'on my wish list' rather than 'in'. Also, passive perfect 'has been recommended' or 'that's been recommended' fits because the coworker recommended it prior to now.

× It's nearby my workplace.

✓ It's near my workplace.

Use 'near' before a noun phrase. 'Nearby' can be used as an adjective ('a nearby park') or adverb ('nearby'), but 'near my workplace' is more natural.

× I think I will go there by next week to take a short walk and spend some time over there as spending time near green spaces makes me feel relaxed and.

✓ I think I will go there next week to take a short walk and spend some time there, as spending time near green spaces makes me feel relaxed.

Remove 'by' before 'next week' unless meaning 'no later than next week'; 'next week' alone is natural. Remove trailing 'and.' Remove 'over' from 'over there'. Keep future 'will' consistent. End sentence cleanly.