Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên hơn, sử dụng thì và cấu trúc chính xác, thêm chi tiết cụ thể và nối ý mạch lạc. Ví dụ: chuyển động từ sai (“make” -> “made”), bỏ cụm “with” cuối câu, và nên nêu một hoạt động cụ thể bạn làm ở công viên để làm câu rõ ràng hơn.

例: Yes. My father often took me to the park near our house, and I made many friends there. We used to play football and ride our bikes together, which was always fun.

提案: Câu trả lời trực tiếp nhưng hơi ngắn và thiếu nối kết. Nên mở rộng nhẹ bằng cách giải thích cụ thể hơn và dùng liên từ để liên kết lý do và kết quả (because, so). Giữ tối đa 5 câu.

例: Not really. I'm very busy during the week, so at the weekend I usually prefer to stay at home and play video games. I find it a good way to relax after a hectic schedule.

提案: Câu trả lời quá ngắn và không rõ ràng vì câu hỏi là về việc muốn có thêm công viên, không phải về độ ồn. Nên trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích lý do cụ thể, dùng liên từ để nối ý và đưa ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: địa điểm ồn, giao thông).

例: Not at the moment. Many areas of my city are quite noisy, and I prefer quiet green spaces. If the city created peaceful parks away from heavy traffic, I would consider visiting them.

提案: Câu trả lời trực tiếp nhưng cần chính xác về thì và cụ thể hơn về thời gian. Tránh dùng “that week” mơ hồ; dùng “these days” hoặc “in the near future”. Thêm liên từ để nối ý và một hoạt động cụ thể làm ví dụ.

例: Not really. I don't have much free time these days, so in the near future I plan to stay home to read, play games, and relax with friends rather than visiting parks.

× Yes, when I was a child my father took me to the park near our house and in the park I make new friends with.

✓ Yes, when I was a child my father took me to the park near our house and in the park I made new friends.

This sentence contains a past tense error and an incorrect use of preposition at the end. The action 'when I was a child' is in the past, so the verb 'make' should be in the past tense 'made' (Grammar Problem Type ID 5: Past tense issue). Also, the phrase 'make new friends with' is ungrammatical in English; the correct phrasing is 'made new friends' without the preposition 'with' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11: Incorrect use of prepositions). Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for actions in the past and avoid unnecessary trailing prepositions; say 'made new friends'.

× No, I don't. I'm very busy during the week and in the weekend I just want to stay at home and play games.

✓ No, I don't. I'm very busy during the week and at the weekend I just want to stay at home and play games.

The time expression 'in the weekend' is incorrect; the usual preposition is 'at the weekend' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11: Incorrect use of prepositions). The rest of the sentence is present simple habitual thinking (Grammar Problem Type ID 6: Present tense issue) and is fine. Suggestion: use 'at the weekend' (British English) or 'on the weekend' (American English) for correctness and consistency.

× Not yet. It's very noisy and I don't like it.

✓ Not really. The park is very noisy and I don't like it.

The response 'Not yet' is odd in this context and doesn't directly answer 'Would you like to see more parks in your city?' A clearer reply names 'the park' or 'parks' and uses definite article if referring to a known place (Grammar Problem Type ID 17: Incorrect use of the definite article / ID 22: Article errors). Suggestion: respond clearly to the question, e.g. 'Not really. The park is very noisy and I don't like it.' This clarifies the subject and uses articles appropriately.

× No, I don't have any free time in that week so I want to stay at home to read books, play games and relax with my friends.

✓ No, I won't have any free time that week, so I want to stay at home to read books, play games and relax with my friends.

The original mixes tenses and uses an incorrect time expression 'in that week'. Because the question asks about the future ('Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?'), the reply should use future reference. Use 'I won't have any free time that week' (Grammar Problem Type ID 7: Future tense issue). Also 'in that week' is unnatural for future reference; 'that week' or 'next week' is correct (Grammar Problem Type ID 11: Incorrect use of prepositions/time expressions). Suggestion: use a future-tense form when referring to planned future time periods and natural time expressions.