Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid long pauses and filler words (uh, um). Use clearer vocabulary for feelings (e.g., relaxed) and activities (e.g., playing on swings).

例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, I felt relaxed there because I could run around freely and play games with my friends, and my family often had picnics which made those visits memorable.

提案: Give a direct answer first and then add one clear reason with a specific recent example. Reduce hesitations and repetitive phrases. Use past or present perfect correctly when referring to recent visits (e.g., 'I went to a park last weekend').

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they remind me of my childhood. For instance, I went to a nearby park last weekend to meet friends, and we played football and had coffee together.

提案: Expand beyond a one-word reply: answer directly and add a reason. Use linking words like 'because' to make your response coherent and informative. Provide one specific benefit of having more parks.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for exercise and relaxation, and more parks would make it easier for families to spend time outdoors.

提案: Mention the park name clearly and give specific reasons or activities you plan to do there. Use linking words (for example, because, so) correctly and avoid filler words. Give a short plan or time reference to make it concrete.

例: Yes, I want to visit Lona Park because it has large lawns and a lake. For example, I plan to go there next month for a picnic and a walk to reduce stress and enjoy the scenery.

× As I remember, yes, I did like to go to the park when I was a child and it was really uh, field like I'm release and also I had the chance to play with my friends and uh, have a fun time with family. So I.

✓ As I remember, yes, I liked to go to the park when I was a child; it felt relaxing, and I had the chance to play with my friends and have a fun time with my family.

The original sentence has several sentence structure problems: awkward phrasing ('field like I'm release' is incorrect), redundant auxiliaries ('did like' is unnecessary in simple past), missing articles and connectors, and an incomplete ending. Use simple past 'liked' to match 'when I was a child', replace the unclear phrase with 'it felt relaxing', include 'my' before 'family', and combine clauses with punctuation or conjunctions for clarity. Suggest practicing forming clear simple past statements and replacing fillers with concise expressions. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Airfly wants to be honest, yes, I do like to go, uh, it feels, uh, like, uh, my childhood. So I really love, I like to go to the park and I still, I'm going to actually, uh, play with my friends and that was the last time that I went to park was.

✓ To be honest, yes, I do like to go; it feels like my childhood. I really love going to the park, and I still play with my friends. The last time I went to the park was recently.

Problems include incorrect introductory phrase ('Airfly' instead of 'To be'), mixed and incorrect tense and verb forms ('I really love, I like to go' is repetitive; 'I'm going to actually play' is inappropriate for present habit), and an incomplete, ungrammatical clause describing the last visit. Use 'To be honest', streamline expressions ('I love going' or 'I like to go'), use simple present for habits ('I still play with my friends'), and simple past for the last visit ('The last time I went to the park was recently'). Practice choosing consistent tense and avoiding filler words. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, I do like.

✓ Yes, I do.

The fragment 'Yes, I do like.' is incomplete because 'like' is a transitive verb that normally requires an object or must be used in a reduced form ('I do' to agree with a preceding verb). In this context the examiner asked if the student would like more parks, so a simple affirmative 'Yes, I do.' or 'Yes, I would.' is appropriate. Suggest using complete short answers: 'Yes, I do.' or 'Yes, I would like that.' Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, there are for instance, I would like to go Lona Park and and reduce my stress and also, uh, go for a picnic because it feels relaxing so.

✓ Yes, there are. For instance, I would like to go to Luna Park to reduce my stress and also have a picnic because it feels relaxing.

Problems include missing preposition 'to' before the park name, repetition ('and and'), incorrect park name spelling assumed 'Lona' to 'Luna', awkward structure and punctuation. Use 'go to Luna Park', 'have a picnic' (not 'go for a picnic' is acceptable but 'have a picnic' is smoother), and split into clear sentences. Also ensure 'there are' needs an object (e.g., 'there are parks I want to visit'); here a fuller response is 'Yes, there are. For instance...'. Practice using correct prepositions with 'go' (go to) and clearer sentence boundaries. Grammar problem type ID:11}]}<?>