Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and sentence clarity: begin with a clear topic sentence, use correct plural and verb forms, and avoid repetition. Add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word.

例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, my family often visited a small neighborhood park where I played on the swings and had picnics, which helped me relax and feel happy.

提案: Make the response more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (infinitive and prepositions), combine repetitive ideas with linking words, and give one specific activity you do there.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. For instance, I often visit the Han River parks with friends, where we sit by the water and chat while having snacks.

提案: Organize and clarify the answer: give a direct response, reduce filler words, correct tense and article usage, and provide a clear reason with a specific detail about the park you want to visit.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. For example, although Seoul already has many green spaces, I want more neighborhood parks because I have not been to Seoul Forest Park and I have heard it has beautiful walking trails and diverse trees.

提案: Provide a concise answer with a specific reason and correct grammar: avoid over-explaining and correct infinitive and verb forms; give one concrete detail about what you would like to do there.

例: Yes, I would like to visit Central Park in New York because I have seen it in many films. For example, I want to walk along the famous pathways and see the lakes and statues that I have watched in movies like Home Alone.

× Parks many parks makes me feel comfortable and they makes my mind calm.

✓ Many parks make me feel comfortable and they make my mind calm.

The original has incorrect word order and subject-verb agreement. 'Many parks' is plural so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes'. Also 'Parks many parks' is redundant and incorrect order; remove the extra 'Parks'. Use 'they make' for the plural pronoun. Suggestion: Say 'Many parks make me feel comfortable' or 'Parks make me feel comfortable.'

× Yes, I like to going to the parks.

✓ Yes, I like going to the parks.

This is an issue with verb form after 'like'. After verbs of preference like 'like', use the gerund (verb+ing) not the infinitive with 'to'. Remove 'to' before 'going'. Suggestion: Use 'I like going to the parks' or 'I like to go to the parks.'

× Until now I usually go to Han River parks with my friends.

✓ Until now, I usually go to the Han River parks with my friends.

Small prepositional/article issue: 'Han River parks' likely needs the definite article 'the' to refer to specific parks along the Han River. Adding a comma after the introductory phrase improves clarity. Suggestion: 'I usually go to the Han River parks with my friends.' or 'I usually go to parks along the Han River with my friends.'

× At there I spend my time with my friends.

✓ There I spend my time with my friends.

'At there' is incorrect. Use 'there' or a preposition plus a noun ('at the park there'). In this context 'There I spend my time' is natural. Suggestion: 'I spend my time there with my friends.'

× I never been there, so I want to go there because I've heard that there trees are.

✓ I have never been there, so I want to go because I've heard that there are trees.

Several issues: missing auxiliary 'have' for present perfect ('I have never been there'), incorrect word order in 'there trees are' which should be 'there are trees'. Also 'go there' repetition is reduced to 'go'. Suggestion: 'I have never been there, and I want to go because I've heard that there are many trees.'

× Umm, we speak together, we talk together.

✓ Umm, we talk together.

Redundant verbs create awkwardness. Both 'speak together' and 'talk together' mean the same; choose one. 'Talk together' is more natural. Suggestion: Use a single verb phrase: 'We talk together' or 'We chat.'

× Especially the movie Home Alone made me to feel like that.

✓ Especially the movie Home Alone made me feel that way.

After 'made' (causative), use the base form of the verb without 'to' ('made me feel' not 'made me to feel'). Also 'like that' is unnatural here; 'that way' fits better. Suggestion: 'The movie Home Alone made me feel that way.'

× Yes, I liked going to a park as a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child.

The original mixes singular and plural. The question asks generally about parks as a child; using plural 'parks' matches the context and avoids awkwardness with 'a park.' Suggestion: 'I liked going to parks as a child.'