Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more accurate with grammar and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses (use past simple consistently) and fix countable/uncountable noun forms. Keep to 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my family and played on the swings and ran around with my siblings. In addition, we sometimes had picnics there, which created many happy memories.

提案: Improve grammar (present simple), sentence structure and remove filler words. Give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use correct verb forms: 'I still go to parks' and explain how they help you.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now. I usually go with my family or friends because it helps me relax and refresh my mind. For example, walking among trees and sitting by a pond makes me feel calmer.

提案: Answer directly then give two clear, specific benefits using linking words. Correct singular/plural and article usage (e.g., 'more parks', 'a great idea') and avoid vague phrases like 'the eyes have something beautiful to'.

例: Yes, definitely — I think more parks would be a great idea. Firstly, they would give people places to relax and spend time with family. Secondly, parks would improve the city's appearance by adding greenery and flowers.

提案: Be specific and correct vocabulary and grammar. Name the park clearly, give one or two clear reasons you want to visit, and avoid invented or unclear words. Use present conditional or future simple correctly ('I would like to visit Mora Park' or 'I want to visit').

例: Yes, I would like to visit Mora Park in the future because it is known for its beautiful gardens and many different flowers. I especially want to walk around the flower beds and learn the names of the plants there.

× Yes I did. I really enjoy uh going to park when I was a child, especially with my family.

✓ Yes I did. I really enjoyed going to parks when I was a child, especially with my family.

The sentence mixes present tense 'enjoy' with a past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'enjoyed' to match the past context. Also 'going to park' needs plural or article; use 'parks' for general activity or 'the park' for a specific park.

× I used to play on the swing, run around and sometime have a picnic.

✓ I used to play on the swings, run around and sometimes have picnics.

For habitual past actions 'used to' is correct. 'The swing' should be plural 'swings' for general use. 'sometime' is the wrong form; use the adverb 'sometimes'. 'a picnic' should be plural 'picnics' to match general habitual actions.

× I think it was a fun way to spend the time outdoor and make a good memories.

✓ I think it was a fun way to spend time outdoors and make good memories.

Use the adverb 'outdoors' not the adjective 'outdoor' after 'spend time'. Omit 'the' before 'time' when speaking generally. 'a good memories' is incorrect: 'memories' is plural so remove 'a' and use 'good memories'.

× Yes, I do I still going to park, uh, usually with my family and friends.

✓ Yes, I do. I still go to parks, usually with my family and friends.

After 'I do' the verb should be base form; 'still going' is incorrect here. Use present simple 'I still go' for habitual action. Use 'parks' for general visits or 'the park' for a specific place.

× Uh, I really like to, uh, went to a park and have a time to relax and also to, uh, like refresh your, your mind, your body, uh, also like have a time to abyss fall and.

✓ Uh, I really like to go to a park and have time to relax and refresh my mind and my body.

The sentence uses 'went' (past) incorrectly after 'I really like to'; use base form 'go'. 'have a time' is unnatural; use 'have time'. 'refresh your mind' should match the subject 'my', so use 'refresh my mind and my body'. The fragment 'have a time to abyss fall and' is unclear and removed; keep concise, meaningful phrases.

× I think it would be a great to have more park in my city because they have a people, uh, the people will have a place to relax and spend time with their family or friends.

✓ I think it would be great to have more parks in my city because people would have places to relax and spend time with their family or friends.

'a great' is incomplete; use 'great' without 'a' or 'a great idea'. 'more park' should be plural 'more parks'. 'they have a people' is incorrect pronoun/use; use 'people' as the subject. 'the people will have a place' should be pluralized to match 'parks' and general meaning: 'people would have places'.

× Also, uh, they can make a city more beautiful and enjoyable and uh, the eyes have something beautiful to.

✓ Also, they can make the city more beautiful and enjoyable and give people something nice to look at.

'a city' switched to general; use 'the city' for the speaker's city. 'the eyes have something beautiful to' is ungrammatical; replace with 'give people something nice to look at' to express the idea clearly and use correct pronouns ('people' rather than 'the eyes').

× Yes, definitely I would like to visit Mora Park or any futures like caloric barks with the beautiful gardens and the beautiful flowers and I want to walking around and see a beautiful flower and the name of the the flower, that's it.

✓ Yes, definitely. I would like to visit Mora Park or any future parks with beautiful gardens and flowers, and I want to walk around, see the flowers and learn their names.

Use 'future parks' not 'futures'. 'caloric barks' is likely mispronounced; use 'parks'. After 'I want to' use the base verb 'walk' not 'walking'. 'see a beautiful flower and the name of the the flower' should be 'see the flowers and learn their names' to be grammatical and natural. Use commas and split clauses for clarity.