Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯且有语法与词汇错误。需注意句子连贯性、时态一致和词汇准确（如parking→parks, didn't have a chance）。回答可更直接开门见山，然后用一两句具体细节支持，并用连接词衔接。尽量控制在最多5句内。

例: Honestly, I wasn’t fond of going to parks as a child. I preferred staying at home playing video games or reading books, because there weren’t many nice parks near my home. As a result, I rarely had the chance to visit them.

提案: 回答含糊、有重复的填充词（uh, like）并且语法不够准确（didn't go to park→didn't go to parks; prefer... watch→prefer watching）。建议用清晰的主题句，解释原因并举例，减少填充词。控制句子数与时态一致。

例: Not really. I rarely go to parks now because I’m usually busy with my studies, and I often prefer indoor activities such as watching movies or reading when I have free time.

提案: 回答逻辑混乱且用词错误（they made→they will make/have made; I it→extraneous words; transporter→transportation）。建议先明确立场，然后给出理由并提出具体替代方案，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I’m not sure there’s a strong need for more parks in my city. Since I don’t often visit parks, I believe the city should prioritise improvements to public transportation and existing recreational facilities instead.

提案: 回答总体可理解但有语法与措辞问题（haven't visit→haven't visited; I hate→likely meant I haven't; awkward衔接）。建议用一到两句话描述具体吸引你的地方并说明计划或感受，保持句子自然流畅。

例: Yes, there’s a new park near my home that I haven’t visited yet. It has a lovely lake and beautiful gardens, so I’d like to spend a relaxing weekend there sometime soon.

× To be honest, I'm not a big fan of going to the parks.

✓ To be honest, I'm not a big fan of going to parks.

这里的名词“parks”不需要定冠词“the”。当说一般的去公园这一活动时，应使用复数名词或不定冠词而不加“the”。建议去掉“the”。

× As a child.

✓ As a child, I much preferred staying at home, like playing video games and getting lost in a good book.

原句“As a child.”是一个不完整的句子，缺少谓语或与前后句的连接。应将其与下一句合并，形成完整句子。建议把片段并入下一句。

× I much preferred staying at home, like playing video games and getting lost in a good book.

✓ I much preferred staying at home, such as playing video games and getting lost in a good book.

这里用“like”列举活动时更自然的表达是“such as”或直接用动名词并列。用“like”引导列举在正式场合显得口语化且易引起歧义。建议用“such as”或直接并列动名词。

× Plus there were not many nice parking near my home so I didn't have chance to enjoy them.

✓ Plus, there were not many nice parks near my home, so I didn't have a chance to enjoy them.

原句中“parking”是“停车场/停车”的意思，错误地使用了词形，应该是“parks”。另外“have chance”缺少不定冠词“a”。句子也需要逗号分隔。建议改为“parks”并加上“a”。

× Uh, not really. I didn't go to park myself because I was busy with my studies and sometimes I prefer like, uh, indoor activities like, uh, watch a movie.

✓ Uh, not really. I didn't go to the park myself because I was busy with my studies, and sometimes I preferred indoor activities, like watching a movie.

“go to park”缺少定冠词，通常应为“go to the park”。时态与语境（过去）一致应使用“preferred”。列举活动时应使用动名词“watching”。句中重复填充词应删减以提高流畅度。

× Actually, I don't think they made more parks in my city.

✓ Actually, I don't think they have made more parks in my city.

说到至今是否建更多公园，使用现在完成时表示从过去到现在的变化更合适：“have made”。原句用简单过去“made”暗示特定过去时间，和前半句“don't think”时态不一致。

× I didn't go there myself and I it would not make much difference to me.

✓ I haven't gone there myself, and it would not make much difference to me.

原句中“I it would”多了“it”，且前半句时态应与谈论至今的态度一致，使用现在完成时“I haven't gone there myself”。去掉多余的代词，修正时态。

× I think they should consider other improvements such as upgrading transporter.

✓ I think they should consider other improvements, such as upgrading transport/transportation.

“transporter”是指运输工具或搬运者，用词不当。应使用“transport”或“transportation”表示交通/运输系统改进。并加逗号引出举例。

× Yes, there is a new park near my home that I haven't visit yet.

✓ Yes, there is a new park near my home that I haven't visited yet.

“haven't visit”缺少过去分词，应使用“visited”与助动词“have”构成现在完成时。表示至今未去过，需用现在完成时。

× I hate.

✓ I haven't been there yet, but I think it's nice.

单独的“I hate.”是不完整且与上下文不符（语义错误）。应改为完整且连贯的表达，例如说明未去过但觉得公园不错。建议用完整句替换不完整或不相关的片段。