Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: Hãy nói rõ ràng và đầy đủ với cấu trúc câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh thiếu chủ ngữ/động từ như “Enjoy playing...”. Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: trò chơi yêu thích, kỷ niệm) và dùng liên từ để nối ý mạch lạc. Giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu.

例: Yes, I did. I used to visit parks often with my parents and friends when I was young. My favourite activity was swinging and playing tag with other children because it was exciting and kept me active. Those outings were a wonderful way to enjoy fresh air and make memories.

提案: Cải thiện: Câu trả lời đã rõ ràng nhưng có thể tự nhiên hơn bằng cách thêm lý do cụ thể và một liên từ để nối ý (ví dụ: because, so). Thêm một ví dụ ngắn về hoạt động cụ thể giúp câu trả lời phong phú hơn. Giữ cấu trúc chủ đề + chi tiết hỗ trợ.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, although I don't visit them as often as before because I am usually busy with work. I usually go there to relax and get fresh air, and sometimes I meet friends to walk or have a casual chat on a bench. Going for a short stroll helps me clear my mind.

提案: Cải thiện: Ý tưởng tốt nhưng lặp từ và có lỗi nhỏ về từ vựng (“room spaces”). Nên dùng từ chính xác như “green spaces” hoặc “public parks”, thêm bằng chứng hoặc ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: giảm ô nhiễm, thúc đẩy sức khỏe). Dùng liên từ để liên kết các lợi ích.

例: Yes, definitely. I believe creating more public parks or green spaces would give residents more places to relax and exercise. For example, parks can encourage children to play outdoors and help adults keep fit, and they can also improve air quality in crowded neighbourhoods. Overall, more parks would make the city more liveable.

提案: Cải thiện: Có lỗi từ vựng/diễn đạt như “lecture parks” và lặp từ. Nên nêu tên hoặc mô tả rõ hơn (ví dụ: botanical gardens, nature reserves), dùng câu hoàn chỉnh và cụ thể hóa hoạt động dự định. Hạn chế danh sách hành động không liên kết bằng cụm từ chuyển tiếp.

例: Yes, I would like to visit some botanical gardens or nature reserves in the future, especially those with many trees and scenic walking trails. I would probably go with friends to walk, take photographs, and relax because these places offer a peaceful escape from the busy city. Visiting such parks would be a great way to recharge.

× Enjoy playing on the swings and running around with other kids acting.

✓ I enjoyed playing on the swings and running around and acting with other kids.

The original sentence lacks a subject and misplaces 'acting.' Use a past tense main verb to match 'I used to go' earlier and include the subject 'I.' Place 'acting' after 'and' to show it is another activity. Suggestion: include subject and coordinate verbs correctly (enjoyed + playing, running, acting).

× So I think having more room spaces would make the city a nicer place to live.

✓ So I think having more open spaces would make the city a nicer place to live.

The phrase 'room spaces' is unidiomatic. Use 'open spaces' or 'green spaces.' Also no article needed before plural 'open spaces.' Suggestion: choose correct noun phrase 'open spaces' for parks and outdoor areas.

× Yes, definitely would like to visit some lecture parks in the future, especially ones with plenty of trees in walking parks.

✓ Yes, I would definitely like to visit some local parks in the future, especially ones with plenty of trees and walking paths.

The sentence lacks the subject 'I' and contains incorrect words: 'lecture parks' (likely 'local parks') and 'walking parks' (should be 'walking paths' or 'walking areas'). Rearranged to include subject and parallel noun phrases 'trees and walking paths.'

× I would probably go there with my friends to take a walk, take some photos, enjoy, relax.

✓ I would probably go there with my friends to take a walk, take some photos, enjoy the scenery and relax.

The verbs should be parallel and 'enjoy' needs an object ('the scenery' or 'the view'). Also combine activities with 'and' for natural flow. Ensure gerunds are used consistently ('to take', 'to take', 'to enjoy', 'to relax') or use nouns/objects for clarity.

× I think it would be a nice ways to get away from the busy city for a while.

✓ I think it would be a nice way to get away from the busy city for a while.

Subject 'it' with 'would be' takes singular complement 'a nice way.' The original 'ways' is plural and disagrees with 'it would be.' Use singular 'way.'

× Yes I did. I used to go to parks quite often when I was a child, usually with my parents or friends.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to go to parks quite often when I was a child, usually with my parents or friends.

Missing comma after 'Yes' for correct written style and clarity. Maintain past tense 'used to' which is appropriate. Suggestion: include comma after interjection 'Yes.'

× I still enjoy going to parks, although I don't go as often as I did when I was a child.

✓ I still enjoy going to parks, although I don't go as often as I did when I was a child.

Sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Keep present 'enjoy' + gerund 'going' and past reference 'did' consistent.

× Sometimes I go with my friends and just walk around or chat.

✓ Sometimes I go with my friends and just walk around or chat.

Sentence is correct and natural; no change needed. Use simple present for habitual actions.