Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (past tense and articles) and proper word order. Avoid asking the examiner questions back. Use linking words like 'so' or 'instead' to connect ideas.

例: No, I didn’t have the chance to go to parks as a child because there were none in my hometown. Instead, we used to walk along the main road for exercise and fresh air, so I missed typical park experiences like playgrounds and trees.

提案: Answer clearly and politely: say yes or no with a brief reason, then give a specific example. Improve grammar (use subject-verb agreement, correct infinitives, and articles) and avoid awkward phrasing like 'waste his or her time'. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'however'.

例: Not really. I rarely go to parks because I mainly exercise at the gym and find parks less convenient. However, I sometimes visit a nearby park on weekends when I want a quiet place to read or relax.

提案: Start with a direct answer ('Yes') and then give specific reasons with clear examples. Fix grammar (articles, plural forms, verb forms) and use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to organize ideas. Be concise and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I would. More parks would benefit both students and adults because they provide safe places for relaxation and informal study. For example, students could revise outdoors before tuition classes, and parents could take children to play nearby.

提案: Answer directly, then give one clear specific example with details. Correct grammar (use articles, plural/singular, and relative clauses) and avoid vague phrases like 'several options' without examples. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'such as' to introduce the park.

例: Yes. For example, I would like to visit Rose Park in Chandigarh because it is famous for its many varieties of roses and well-kept gardens. I think it would be peaceful and a great place for photography.

× Well when I was a child there is no park in my hometown so that's why I don't know about that.

✓ Well, when I was a child there were no parks in my hometown, so I don't know about that.

Incorrect use of 'there is' for past situation and singular/plural: the speaker refers to the past, so use past 'there were'. Also 'no park' implies plural 'parks' better here because general absence; add commas for clarity.

× What is the feeling of going parks and rather than visiting a park we go to a walking on the main Rd.

✓ What is the feeling of going to parks? Rather than visiting a park, we used to go for a walk on the main road.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'going'; 'going parks' is incorrect. 'go to a walking' is wrong — correct phrase is 'go for a walk'. Use past habitual 'used to' or simple past 'we went' because sentence refers to childhood. Abbreviations like 'Rd.' should be written 'road'.

× I don't like to go in the park because it only helps in to maintain our physical health as well as if somebody have enough time to waste his or her time in the park then they will definitely go, but I don't prefer to go in the parks.

✓ I don't like going to the park because it only helps to maintain our physical health. If somebody has enough free time, they will definitely go, but I don't prefer going to parks.

Use gerund 'going to' rather than 'to go in'. Remove extra 'in'. 'Helps to maintain' is correct; 'helps in to maintain' is wrong. Subject-verb agreement: 'somebody have' should be 'somebody has'. Use gender-neutral 'they' consistently. Use 'free time' instead of 'waste his or her time'.

× Definitely, I would like to see many parks in my city because it helps the mostly students as well as adults to spend their time in free time period before they entering to their tuition classes and adults are also.

✓ Definitely, I would like to see many parks in my city because they would mostly help students as well as adults to spend their free time before they enter their tuition classes.

Mismatch of singular/plural and unclear pronoun reference: 'it helps the mostly students' should be plural 'they would mostly help students'. 'Free time period' is redundant; use 'free time'. Verb tense and form: 'before they entering' should be 'before they enter'. Remove trailing 'and adults are also' which is incomplete.

× Yes, definitely. It's a great question for me because I have several options to go in the park in my future, but I don't know what their name and I want to go Rose Park in Chandigarh, which is very beautiful and it is entirely full of roses.

✓ Yes, definitely. That's a great question for me because I have several parks I might visit in the future, but I don't know their names. I want to go to Rose Park in Chandigarh because it is very beautiful and full of roses.

Incorrect verb forms and prepositions: 'to go in the park in my future' should be 'parks I might visit in the future'. 'I don't know what their name' should be 'I don't know their names'. Use 'go to Rose Park' not 'go Rose Park'. Simplify 'entirely full of roses' to 'full of roses' for naturalness.