Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорите более связно и корректно: начните с понятного тематического предложения, уберите повторы и заполнители («uh», «um»), исправьте грамматику (например, «I'm really a sporty person»). Добавьте одно короткое уточняющее предложение с конкретным примером, используя связующее слово (например, because/so) — это сделает ответ естественным и информативным.

例: Yes, I did. I was very active as a child because I loved playing football and climbing trees, so parks were my favorite place to spend afternoons.

提案: Улучшите грамматику и словосочетания: используйте правильные артикли и формы глаголов («I am a very active person»). Избавьтесь от неуместных выражений («smart credit schedule» не по смыслу) и объясните, как парки вписываются в распорядок, используя связку (for example/so).

例: Yes, I do. I am a very active person, so I often go to parks to jog or exercise in the mornings. For example, I usually run there three times a week to stay fit.

提案: Говорите проще и логичнее: дайте прямой ответ (Yes/No) и объяснение с причинами. Избегайте непонятных имён и фраз; используйте связующие слова (because/so/therefore) и конкретные аргументы (здоровье, отдых, природа).

例: Yes, I would. I think more parks would improve people's health and provide places for families to relax, because parks offer fresh air and space for exercise.

提案: Дайте конкретный ответ и поясните выбор: назовите парк или опишите, почему хотите его посетить. Уберите повторяющиеся слова и паузы, используйте связки (for example/because) и уточняющие детали (what attracts you).

例: Yes, I would like to visit Gorky Park in Moscow because I have heard it has beautiful gardens and many cultural events, and I have never walked there before.

× Yes, I did and I liked it now too.

✓ Yes, I did, and I like it now too.

The student used past tense 'liked' with 'now'; when indicating a present continuing preference, use present simple 'like'. Use comma before 'and' connecting independent clauses.

× Uh, I think I'm really sporting person and uh, it's a reason why I like it.

✓ Uh, I think I'm a really sporty person, and that's a reason why I like it.

Use the adjective 'sporty' (not noun 'sporting') to describe a person. Include the article 'a' before singular countable noun 'person'. Use 'that's' (that is) to refer back to the reason.

× Yes, I do. I think I really active person and it's my lifestyle to be honest.

✓ Yes, I do. I think I am a really active person, and it's my lifestyle, to be honest.

A present-tense identity needs 'am' for first-person singular and the article 'a' before 'person'. Commas improve readability around the phrase 'to be honest'.

× I think I have healthier style with really smart credit schedule.

✓ I think I have a healthier lifestyle with a really smart daily schedule.

Use the noun 'lifestyle' instead of 'style' for habits. Add articles 'a'. 'Credit schedule' is incorrect; likely intended 'daily schedule' or 'routine'. 'Really smart' modifies 'schedule' so word order adjusted.

× Uh, yes I will.

✓ Uh, yes, I would.

In response to 'Would you like...' the polite conditional 'I would' or 'Yes, please' is appropriate. 'I will' expresses a future action but not a direct answer to a preference question.

× I from my perspective, I think it's really Angela's choice to see a lot of place in your city, umm, and your home city, umm, I think many people, uh, must do it.

✓ From my perspective, I think it's really a good idea to create many parks in your city and in other cities; I think people should visit them.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Angela's choice' is irrelevant; likely meant 'a good idea'. Use 'many parks' (plural) and proper modal 'should' for recommendation. Reorder phrases for clarity and add articles.

× Umm, it's difficult question.

✓ Umm, it's a difficult question.

Add the article 'a' before 'difficult question' for a singular countable noun.

× I can't say clearly clearly, but I think, uh, it is umm, park ready in Moscow because I never uh, walk in this park.

✓ I can't say clearly, but I think there is a park in Moscow that I'm ready to visit because I have never walked in that park.

Use 'there is' to indicate existence (there be issue). 'Ready' should relate to visiting, not to the park; rephrase. Use present perfect 'have never walked' to relate past experience to present. Use 'that' to refer back to the park.

× Umm, I think I would like to visit.

✓ Umm, I think I would like to visit it.

Add the object pronoun 'it' to specify the park being referred to. 'Would like to visit' correctly expresses future desire in conditional form.