Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要用正确时态并更自然。提到过去的经历时应使用过去时（例如 “I liked”），并把时间表达放在合适位置；避免冗长或不连贯的句子。可以给出一两条具体细节来丰富内容（例如朋友的数量、常去的公园或喜欢的游乐设施）。保持句子不超过五句。

例: I liked going to parks when I was a child because they always made me happy. For example, when I was about eight I used to play hide-and-seek with three close friends in the local park every weekend.

提案: 表达要更自然并注意用词搭配（不要说 “relax myself”）。说明原因时最好具体说明你做哪些事情让你放松，以及频率或场景。可用连接词如 “because” 或 “so” 来组织逻辑。

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because my life is busier now and I need a place to unwind. For instance, I often take a 30-minute walk in the park after work to clear my mind and reduce stress.

提案: 观点明确但表达可更自然、具体。避免绝对化和口号式句子（例如 “Humans are destroying…”），改为具体理由和效果（如改善空气质量、提供休闲空间）。可以用连词如 “because” 和 “for example” 来增强逻辑。

例: Yes, I would. More parks would improve air quality and give residents more places to relax. For example, adding green spaces near busy roads could reduce pollution and provide safe areas for families to exercise.

提案: 陈述要更具体并注意事实准确性（不要笼统地说 “very popular in the world”）。可以补充你为什么感兴趣、想什么时候去以及计划做什么。用一到两句支持细节，保持自然表达。

例: Yes, I would love to visit Logan Park in my hometown because it has a wide variety of native plants. I hope to go next spring to see the blossoms and take photographs of the rare trees there.

× Yes, I like going to parks as a child because it can put me into a happy mood.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because they put me in a happy mood.

句子中时间状语“as a child”表明动作发生在过去，但原句使用现在时“like”不符合上下文，应使用过去时“liked”。另外“parks”为复数，代词应使用“they”；短语“put me into a happy mood”用法不自然，改为“put me in a happy mood”。建议：遇到明确的过去时间指示（as a child, 10 years ago等），将动词改为过去时，注意代词与复数名词一致。

× For example, I always play hide and seek with my friends 10 years ago.

✓ For example, I always played hide-and-seek with my friends 10 years ago.

句中有明确过去时间标志“10 years ago”，动词应使用过去时“played”而不是现在时“play”。此外“hide and seek”作为固定短语在书面语中常写为“hide-and-seek”。建议：有过去时间词时把动词改为过去时，注意固定短语的连字符写法。

× Yes, I still like going to parks now because there are more and more tasks in my life and this event can relax myself greatly.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now because there are more and more tasks in my life and this activity can relax me a lot.

原句时态“still like ... now”没有问题，但句中“this event”用词不当，公园活动不是“event（事件）”，改为“activity（活动）”。另外“relax myself”在英语中通常用非反身形式“relax me”；“greatly”虽可用但更常见更自然的搭配是“a lot”。建议：选择更合适的名词（activity），避免不必要的反身代词，用更自然搭配。

× Humans are destroying our lovely Earth now, and we should protect it from now.

✓ Humans are destroying our lovely Earth now, and we should protect it from now on.

短语“from now”通常需要搭配“on”形成“from now on”，表示从现在起持续发生的动作。建议记住固定短语“from now on”表示“从现在起”。

× Yes, I want to go to the Logan Park in my hometown.

✓ Yes, I want to go to Logan Park in my hometown.

地名中若包含专有名称“Logan Park”，前面通常不加定冠词“the”，除非名称本身带有“the”（如The Hague）。因此应去掉“the”。建议：专有地名前一般不用冠词，注意特殊例外。

× There are so many fantastic plants in it and it's very popular in the world.

✓ There are so many fantastic plants there and it's very popular in the world.

句中指代地点时用“in it”不自然，因为前句提到的“Logan Park”是地点，使用“there”更自然。若想用代词可用“it is”指公园本身，但“in it”用于“plants in it”可以，问题更在第二分句。另：短语“popular in the world”不够地道，常说“popular throughout the world”或“popular worldwide”。综合修改为更自然的表达，并避免“in it”重复造成歧义。建议：指代地点时用“there”或重用名词，关于“全球流行”用“worldwide”或“throughout the world”。