Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答简短且自然，但太简短缺乏细节和支持句。可以在主题句之后补充一两句具体回忆或原因，使用连接词使回答更连贯。注意句子不要超过五句。

例: Yes, I did. I often visited the neighborhood park with my family because there was a big playground and a pond. I loved feeding the ducks and playing on the swings, which made those visits memorable.

提案: 回答直接但略显口语化（例如省略逗号）且信息单一。可以先给出主题句，然后用连接词说明原因并加上具体细节或感受，使表达更自然和完整。

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I rarely have time because my studies keep me very busy. However, when I do visit a park, I use the break to relax and clear my mind from studying.

提案: 回答包含理由但有犹豫词(umm)和重复表达。应去掉犹豫语，使用更丰富的词汇和衔接词，把观点和具体好处（如休闲空间、环境改善）连贯表达。

例: Yes, I would. More parks would not only make the city more attractive but also improve air quality and provide green spaces for exercise and relaxation.

提案: 回答意图明确但语法和词汇不够准确（“parks in different forms”, “more facility”）。建议先给出简洁回应，再用具体例子说明想要的公园类型和原因，注意名词和复数形式的正确使用。

例: Yes, I would like parks with varied facilities, such as sports courts, children's playgrounds and quiet garden areas, so I can either exercise or relax during my free time.

× Yes I do, but I have no time to go to parks because my study is busy.

✓ Yes, I do, but I have no time to go to parks because my studies are busy.

句子使用现在时表述现在的情况，但名词“study”在此处作可数含义（学习课程/学业）应使用复数“studies”。建议：将单数名词改为复数以符合常见搭配。

× Yes, I would umm, because I think more parks can make city more beautiful and more plants can make air clearer.

✓ Yes, I would, umm, because I think more parks can make the city more beautiful and more plants can make the air clearer.

存在冠词和可数名词单复数问题。“city”和“air”在泛指特定城市和空气时通常需要定冠词“the”。此外原句缺少逗号分隔口语停顿（可选）。建议在特定名词前加定冠词。

× I want more parks in different forms, like more facility that I can play and enjoy my free time.

✓ I want more parks in different forms, like more facilities where I can play and enjoy my free time.

“facility”在此处指多个设施应使用复数“facilities”。另外从句引导与地点相关，使用“where”比“that”更自然；也可使用“that I can use to play”之类结构。建议将名词改为复数并调整关系词。