Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response grammatically correct, give a clear topic sentence, and add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb form and avoid short fragmented replies.

例: Yes, I really liked going to parks as a child. I often went there with my parents to play on the swings and feed the ducks, which made weekends fun and relaxing.

提案: Use correct tense and natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give concise reasons using linking words (e.g., because, and, so). Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because the fresh air and greenery help me relax. For example, I often walk there in the mornings to exercise and clear my mind.

提案: Provide a direct, relevant answer and explain why. Avoid unclear references (e.g., 'my CD'). Use linking words and specific details about benefits or reasons.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide space for exercise and community events. More parks would make neighborhoods quieter and healthier, especially for children and elderly people.

提案: Be specific about which park or type of park you want to visit and give concise reasons. Use correct prepositions and natural phrasing (e.g., 'go to Canada' and 'visit parks in Canada').

例: Yes, I would love to visit national parks in Canada, such as Banff National Park, because of the stunning mountains and lakes. The clean air and beautiful scenery would be perfect for hiking and photography.

× Yes, I'm really like.

✓ Yes, I really like going to parks.

The student used 'I'm really like' which mixes 'to be' with the verb 'like' incorrectly. This is a sentence structure and subject-verb usage error (related to IDs 2 and 26). Use 'I really like' to express preference and add the activity 'going to parks' to be clear. Suggestion: say 'I really like going to parks.'

× Yes, I'm really like because today is so good, better. So I'm very enjoyable.

✓ Yes, I still really like going to parks because the weather is very good today, so I enjoy it very much.

Multiple errors: 'I'm really like' is incorrect (use 'I really like'); 'today is so good, better' is awkward and ungrammatical for weather description; 'I'm very enjoyable' is wrong because 'enjoyable' describes something, not a person's feeling. Use present tense 'I enjoy it' or 'I enjoy myself' to describe feeling. Suggestion: 'I still really like going to parks because the weather is very good today, so I enjoy it very much.' (addresses IDs 6, 13, 26)

× Yes, I'm really like my CD is is good, good parks.

✓ Yes, I really like them. My city has good parks.

The original has unclear phrasing and repetition 'is is' and 'my CD' likely meant 'my city'. 'I really like them' refers to parks; 'My city has good parks' uses correct subject-verb agreement and articles. This corrects sentence structure and article/pronoun misuse (IDs 26, 22, 12).

× I want to go Canada.

✓ I want to go to Canada.

The verb 'go' requires the preposition 'to' before place names. This is a preposition error (ID 11). Suggestion: always use 'go to' + place name.

× I, I want to go park in Canada because Canada weather is so good.

✓ I want to go to a park in Canada because the weather in Canada is very good.

Several errors: missing 'to' before 'park' and missing article 'a' before 'park' (IDs 11 and 22). Also 'Canada weather' needs 'the weather in Canada' (preposition and article). Use 'is very good' for present tense description. Suggestion: 'I want to go to a park in Canada because the weather in Canada is very good.'