Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (tense, articles, plurals) and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. However, because my family had little money, we couldn't go often, so I used to watch other children playing from the edge of the park and imagine joining them.

提案: Answer directly and expand with a specific reason and a brief example. Use correct tense and a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks. However, I work long hours during the week, so I rarely find the time; at most I visit briefly on weekends for a short walk.

提案: Give a clear opinion, then support it with specific details and correct grammar (singular/plural, article use). Use linking words to explain consequences or reasons.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are currently very few green spaces. As a result, people have limited places to relax or exercise, and adding parks would improve residents' quality of life.

提案: Be specific and concise: name the place, give a short reason, and add a brief plan or expectation. Use natural phrasing and correct articles.

例: Yes, I would love to visit Disneyland in my country because it has many attractions and entertainment options. I hope to go on holiday there next year to try the rides and enjoy the shows.

× Yes, I like going to park as a child, but since we don't have enough money, I just watch from afar.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child, but since we didn't have enough money, I just watched from afar.

Tense mismatch and article/plural: The question asks about childhood (past), so use past tense 'liked' and 'didn't have' and 'watched'. Also 'park' should be plural or countable with an article: 'parks' or 'the park'. Use 'parks' to match general meaning.

× I just watch the child playing there.

✓ I just watched the children playing there.

Number and tense: 'child' should be plural 'children' if observing kids in general; also past tense 'watched' matches 'as a child'. If referring to a specific child, use 'the child' and past tense. Here general observation fits 'children'.

× Yes, I like going to parks now, but since I have work I still don't have time to go there.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks now, but because I have work I still don't have time to go there.

Tense is acceptable (present), but natural connector is 'because' rather than 'since' to express reason in speech. No tense change needed. Suggestion improves clarity.

× Yes, I like to see more parks in our city, but unfortunately there's no park there, so it's really hard to see a parks.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in our city, but unfortunately there aren't any parks there, so it's really hard to find them.

Modal/phrasing and article/plural errors: 'like to see' is grammatically okay but 'would like' is more natural for desire. 'There's no park' should be 'there aren't any parks' for plural. 'see a parks' mixes article and plural; corrected to 'find them' or 'visit them'.

× Yes, I have something in my mind which I want to go outside in our country.

✓ Yes, I have something in mind: I want to travel outside the country.

Awkward phrasing and preposition use: 'in my mind' is okay but 'something in my mind which I want to go outside in our country' is ungrammatical. Use 'I have something in mind' then clearer verb 'travel outside the country'. Also 'in our country' contradicted 'go outside' — corrected for clarity.

× I want to go to Disneyland and enjoy there because there's a lot to play there.

✓ I want to go to Disneyland and enjoy it because there are many things to play on/with there.

Agreement and preposition: 'there's a lot to play there' is informal and singular; use 'there are many things to play on' or better 'there are many attractions to enjoy'. Also use 'enjoy it' to refer to Disneyland. Ensure subject-verb agreement 'there are' with plural 'things'.