Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct, more natural and slightly more detailed. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one specific reason or memory using a linking word. Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

例: Yes, I loved going to the park when I was a child. I went almost every day because I enjoyed playing on the swings and meeting my friends. For example, we often raced on the grass after school, which was great fun.

提案: This answer is good but can be improved for natural flow and specificity. Use a clear topic sentence in present tense, then add a linking word and a specific example of activities or frequency. Avoid redundant phrases like 'Of course, yes.'

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually go a few times a week to exercise and play football with my friends, which helps me stay fit and relax after work.

提案: The response is unclear and contains grammar errors. Give a direct opinion, explain why with a specific reason, and use linking words to connect ideas. Mention a realistic benefit or example to support your view.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in Al Ain City because they provide green space for families and exercise areas for residents. For instance, additional parks near residential areas would make it easier for children to play safely and for people to walk or jog.

提案: Good content but make it more natural and add a reason or detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you want to visit and when or how you might go. Keep it concise and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I would love to visit Hyde Park in London because I have heard it is very large and beautiful. I hope to go there when I travel to the UK to enjoy the scenery and maybe rent a boat on the Serpentine lake.

× Yes, when I was a child I like to go to the park every day.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked to go to the park every day.

The sentence refers to a habitual action in the past ('when I was a child'), so the past simple tense should be used. 'Like' (present) is incorrect here; use 'liked' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: use past simple for repeated past actions: 'I liked to go' or 'I used to go.'

× Of course, yes, I go to the park to do some exercises or to play football with my friends.

✓ Of course, yes, I go to the park to do some exercise or to play football with my friends.

The sentence is mostly correct in present tense for a habitual action. However, 'exercises' is commonly uncountable when referring to exercise as activity, so 'some exercise' is more natural. No tense change is needed. Suggestion: use 'some exercise' or 'exercises' if referring to specific exercise routines.

× Yes, and I'm seeing. More parks in Alain City.

✓ Yes, and I would like to see more parks in Al Ain City.

The original uses 'I'm seeing' which is incorrect here. The question asks about desire for more parks; use 'would like' or 'want' to express preference. Also 'Alain' should be 'Al Ain' (two words) for the city name. This corrects both verb choice and proper noun form. Suggestion: use 'I would like to see' or 'I want to see.'

× I want to go to the Hyde Park in London.

✓ I want to go to Hyde Park in London.

When referring to named parks like 'Hyde Park', the definite article 'the' is not used in English. Remove 'the' before the park name. Also keep present/future intention: 'I want to go to Hyde Park in London.' Suggestion: omit 'the' with most proper park names.