Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答能表达基本意思，但语法和词汇错误较多，导致不够自然和清晰。改进要点：1) 使用正确的时态，谈过去习惯用过去式或过去进行时（e.g. I liked/ I used to go）。2) 简洁明了地说明活动并提供1-2个具体细节（例如玩什么、谁一起去）。3) 避免不明确或错误的短语（例如“ride my bike with my plane”应改为“ride my bike with my friends”）。4) 最多5句，保持连贯可加入连接词例如 “and”/“also”。

例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I often rode my bike there with my friends, and we played games on the grass. Sometimes my family had picnics, which was really fun.

提案: 回答意思模糊且时态混乱，需用现在时说明目前情况并清晰比较过去与现在。改进要点：1) 直接回答并用比较句型（e.g. I used to..., but now...）。2) 将原因具体化（比如工作、学习忙），避免不自然短语（如“time is going fast”在此不合适）。3) 使用连接词（however, because）使句子连贯，保持句子数不超过5句。

例: I used to enjoy going to parks, but I don't go as often now. As an adult I am quite busy with work and study, so I usually have little free time. However, I still visit parks occasionally when I have a day off.

提案: 回答较完整，表达了理由，但有几处语法和用词需要改进。改进要点：1) 使用正确的主谓一致（city has one park）。2) 用更自然的短语表达目的和效果（e.g. get fresh air, exercise more easily）。3) 提供一两个具体例子或结果能更有说服力（比如减少污染或提高居民健康）。4) 保持句子简洁并用连接词如 because, so, therefore。

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there is only one park now. More parks would help people get fresh air and exercise more easily, and they would provide places for families and friends to relax on weekends.

提案: 表达含糊且有多处语法错误，需更明确地说明具体目的地和原因。改进要点：1) 明确地点（e.g. parks in Beijing or a specific park）并使用正确的结构（I want to visit）。2) 说明具体原因，如欣赏风景、了解历史或看植物。3) 用连贯句子并控制在5句以内。

例: In the future I would like to visit parks in Beijing because I have never seen them. I want to explore their landscapes and see different plants and trees. It would also be a good chance to learn more about the city's culture and history.

× Yes, I like going to park when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child.

句中时间是“when I was a child”（过去），动词应使用过去时。将like改为liked，并且“park”应为复数或加定冠词（parks 或 the park）。建议：回忆过去时用过去式动词，并注意可数名词单复数。

× I also ride my bike with my plane.

✓ I also rode my bike and flew my toy plane.

原句结构混乱且时态不一致。根据上下文，应描述过去的两个活动：骑自行车和玩玩具飞机。用过去式rode和flew，并用连词and连接。建议：列举过去活动时统一使用过去时，并用and连接并列动词。

× We are both raised by to take the air.

✓ We both used to go out to get some fresh air.

原句语序和结构不正确，含义不明确。用“used to”表示过去常做的事情，“go out to get some fresh air”表达“去呼吸新鲜空气”。建议：表达过去习惯用used to，保持清晰的动词短语结构。

× Now when I was a child I like going to park, but now I am a adult the time is going fast.

✓ When I was a child I liked going to parks, but now I'm an adult and time goes by quickly.

句中混用了过去和现在时，需分清时态。第一部分描述过去应用过去式liked；第二部分现在为事实用现在时goes by或is going by（一般事实用goes by）。同时a adult应为an adult，冠词用法错误也被修正。建议：区分过去经历和现在状态，冠词前元音发音用an。

× We don't have any other time to park because we have business. Study.

✓ We don't have time to go to the park because we are busy studying.

原句中“time to park”表达不当，应为“time to go to the park”；“we have business. Study.”语序和词汇错误，意为“我们忙于学习”。使用现在进行或现在分词短语“busy studying”。建议：用固定搭配have time to do sth，busy 后接动名词或现在分词。

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because my city only have one park.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because my city only has one park.

主语my city为第三人称单数，动词应加-s（has）。此外prefer表达询问用would like正确。建议：注意主谓一致，第三人称单数动词加-s。

× More park would let people take in fresh air, exercise more easy, and relax with family or friend on weekends.

✓ More parks would let people get fresh air, exercise more easily, and relax with family or friends on weekends.

名词应为复数parks；短语“take in fresh air”更常用get fresh air；“exercise more easy”应改为副词more easily；family or friend应为复数friends或family members以匹配复数people。建议：可数名词注意单复数，副词修饰动词用-easily，搭配family or friends更自然。

× In the future I want to go Beijing Parks because I haven't to see them.

✓ In the future I want to go to Beijing parks because I haven't seen them yet.

缺少介词to（go to Beijing），且“haven't to see”错误，应为现在完成时haven't seen表示至今未看过，且加yet更自然。建议：移动动词短语go to，完成时态用have/has + past participle。

× So I went to go there to have a see see the environment, also have the plant.

✓ So I will go there to see the environment and the plants.

句中时态与前句未来时一致应使用will go或want to go；“have a see see”为口语且重复，改为see；“have the plant”应为see the plants或enjoy the plants。建议：用标准表达see the environment/see the plants，保持时态一致并避免重复词。