Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并用正确时态与简洁句子表达童年经历。避免填充词（uh）与重复，使用连词使句子连贯，并提供具体细节（例如和谁去、哪类活动、频率）。

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my friends and siblings to play games like hide-and-seek and ride bicycles. We usually spent our afternoons there on weekends, which made it a memorable part of my childhood.

提案: 回答要用更流畅的句子并注意语法（时态、主谓一致）。说明当前情况时提供具体频率或例子，并用连接词解释原因，避免重复。

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I don't go very often now because I am preparing for the DSC exam. I usually visit a park once every few weeks to relax for an hour after studying.

提案: 回答应先有主题句，然后用连词展开具体理由和例子，注意语法与词形（parks are, give us）。避免未完成的句子，说明希望增设的公园类型或位置会更具体。

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide a peaceful place to relax and improve mental well-being. For example, more small neighborhood parks near schools and offices would make it easier for people to exercise or unwind after work.

提案: 回答应更清晰地区分过去经常去的公园和未来想去的公园，使用正确表达（e.g. "I often go to..." "I would like to visit...")，并给出为何想去的具体原因（景点特色、历史或风景）。

例: I often visit parks in my country, such as Victoria Park. In the future, I would like to visit Xuanwu Lake Park in Nanjing because I have heard it has beautiful lakeside views and historic pavilions that are worth seeing.

× Yes, actually I like to go to park when I was a child because there are some, uh, cohesance of age to me and the park and I can play with them such as, uh, we play too many things such as hide and seek or ride a bicycle. Yeah, that's all.

✓ Yes, actually I liked going to parks when I was a child because there were other children of my age there and I could play with them. We played many games such as hide-and-seek or rode bicycles.

句子中时态混用：问题在于开头问的是“作为孩子时是否喜欢去公园”，应使用过去时（liked / was）而不是一般现在时（like）。另外需将“go to park”改为复数或加冠词（go to parks / go to the park），并把存在句“there are”改为过去时“there were”。建议统一使用过去时并调整名词复数与冠词，语序和短语也要更自然。

× Uh, actually I still like to go into park now, but I think I don't have enough time to go to parks, so I because I need to prepare my DSC exam, so I think I need to put more time in my study. Yeah, to have a revision and study.

✓ Uh, actually I still like going to parks now, but I don't have enough time to go because I need to prepare for my DSC exam, so I need to spend more time studying and revising.

时态与动词形式问题：描述现在的喜好时用现在进行或一般现在时（still like going / still like to go）；短语“go into park”不自然，应为“go to parks”；“prepare my DSC exam”应使用介词“prepare for an exam”。另外“put more time in my study”改为“spend more time studying/revising”更地道。注意一致使用现在时态和动词不定式/动名词形式。

× To see more parks in my city because I think parks is a good place to relax and give our inner balance and I think parks is a good way to have fun. To have a good way to relax ex escape from the.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I think parks are good places to relax and help us find inner balance. Parks are also a good way to have fun and to escape from stress.

主谓一致错误：“parks is”应为“parks are”，因parks为复数。句子碎片化且结构不完整（例如开头的“To see more parks...”应为完整回答“Yes, I would like...”）。另外“give our inner balance”表达不自然，改为“help us find inner balance”更准确。最后补全未完成的短语“escape from the stress”。

× Actually I basically go to the OR parks in my country such as Victoria Park and so on. So if you really want to me to talk 1 parks I want to go in the future I think is in mainland China. Nanjing is the Nanjing Xuanwu Park, yeah.

✓ Actually I usually go to local parks in my country such as Victoria Park. If you want me to name a park I want to visit in the future, I think it would be in mainland China — Nanjing Xuanwu Park.

介词和短语使用不当：原句“go to the OR parks”不清晰，应为“go to local parks”（去本地的公园）。“want to me to talk”语序错误，应为“want me to talk”或“want me to name”。另外时间/地点表达需用“visit in the future”而不是单纯“go”。将句子简化并修正语序与介词，使表达更自然。