Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep answers concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Fix verb forms, articles and word choice (e.g., 'loved going', 'helped me relax', 'unwind', 'when I walked'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' appropriately.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they helped me relax. For example, I often walked along tree-lined paths and listened to birds, which made me feel calm and happy.

提案: Be specific about how parks help you now and avoid filler words like 'umm'. Use correct vocabulary ('de-stress' instead of 'distread') and grammar (singular/plural, prepositions). Provide one clear reason and a brief example or habit.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me de-stress after work. For instance, I often walk there for 30 minutes and chat with neighbors, which improves my mood and clears my mind.

提案: Answer directly and give concrete reasons with correct word choice and structure. Replace unclear phrases ('held up') with precise ideas like 'beneficial' or 'improve quality of life'. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'so' and finish the thought.

例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they would improve air quality and provide comfortable places for people to exercise. For example, new parks could encourage families to spend time outdoors and reduce pollution in crowded areas.

提案: Be concise and correct grammar: use 'I would like to visit', 'it is spacious', and avoid repeating. Give a short reason and one specific activity you would do there. Keep to 2–3 sentences max.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Olympic Park in Bangkok because it is very spacious and has excellent playgrounds. I would go there with my family to have a picnic and let the children play on the equipment.

× Yes, of course, once I was a child I loved to going to the park because it's helped me to relax and unwire beside us when I walking along the park is.

✓ Yes, of course; when I was a child I loved going to the park because it helped me to relax and unwind while I walked through the park.

Errors: incorrect verb + -ing after 'loved' ('to going' should be 'going'); incorrect auxiliary and tense for 'helped' ('it's helped' should be past 'it helped'); wrong verb form 'unwire' should be 'unwind'; incorrect clause order and tense 'when I walking' should be 'while I walked'. Suggestion: Use 'loved' + gerund (loved going), match past tense throughout (was, loved, helped, walked), and use correct verbs ('unwind').

× Yes, definitely. Nowadays I still like going to the parks because it helps me to distread while I walk along the park and also when I'm chatting with the neighborhood it helps me to umm.

✓ Yes, definitely. Nowadays I still like going to parks because it helps me to de-stress while I walk through the park, and when I'm chatting with neighbors it also helps me relax.

Errors: 'the parks' can be general 'parks' (article use); 'distread' is not correct — use 'de-stress' or 'relax'; 'walk along the park' awkward — use 'walk through the park'; 'the neighborhood' should be 'neighbors' for people. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions (I still like, it helps, I walk), choose correct vocabulary ('de-stress', 'neighbors'), and use natural prepositions ('through the park').

× Yes, of course, I would like to see more parks in my town because I think it's held up. People in the country will have the fresh air and also is comfortable to many people to come along and.

✓ Yes, of course. I would like to see more parks in my town because I think they are needed. People in the area would have fresh air, and it would be comfortable for many people to visit.

Errors: 'it's held up' is incorrect usage — likely intended 'they are needed' or 'it is lacking'; subject agreement: 'People in the country' is awkward, use 'people in the area' or 'in the town'; 'is comfortable to many people to come along' is ungrammatical — use 'it would be comfortable for many people to visit'. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms and subject-verb agreement ('they are needed'), choose appropriate nouns ('area' or 'town'), and use proper conditional/modal forms ('would have', 'would be comfortable').

× Yes, I would like to go to the Olympic Parks in Bangkok in the future if I have time, I would like to go there because it's really have a spacious and parks and playgrounds makes me to spend time with my family and I.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to the Olympic Park in Bangkok in the future if I have time. I want to go because it is very spacious and the parks and playgrounds allow me to spend time with my family.

Errors: 'Olympic Parks' should be singular 'Olympic Park' if referring to one site; 'it's really have a spacious' mixes forms — use 'it is very spacious'; 'parks and playgrounds makes me to spend' has subject-verb agreement and infinitive errors — use 'park(s) and playgrounds allow me to spend' or 'let me spend'; 'with my family and I' should be 'with my family' (object form 'me' if needed, but here 'my family' suffices). Suggestion: Use correct noun number, match verb forms with subject, and use correct verb patterns ('allow' or 'let' + object + base verb).