Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接，但不完整且有语法与省略问题。应补全句子并提供具体细节（比如做什么活动、频率或感受），使用连接词使表达更自然。注意不要超过五句。

例: Yes, I liked going to parks after school when I was a child. I often played football and rode bikes with my friends, which helped us relax after classes. Because the parks were near my school, we went there almost every day, and I remember feeling happy and energetic.

提案: 回答清晰且较完整，但可以更自然、具体并用连接词。补充频率、典型活动或原因可提升内容丰富性。注意句子衔接和少量语法改进。

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I like the fresh air and peaceful atmosphere. There is a large park near my home, so I usually visit it with my parents on weekends to walk, chat and sometimes have a picnic.

提案: 观点明确但表达不够准确，用词有误（例如 'prove air quality' 不自然）。应给出具体原因或例子，使用连接词如 'because' 或 'for example' 来组织句子。

例: Absolutely. I would like more parks in my city because they provide places for people to meet and exercise, and they help improve air quality by providing more trees and green space.

提案: 回答提供了地点和部分原因，但句子未完成且措辞可改进（如 'weeds' 可换成 'plants' 或 'shrubs'）。建议补完结尾并加上计划或期待的细节，使用连接词使信息连贯。

例: Yes, there is a new park along the Yangtze River near my home. It has many large trees and shrubs, so the air is very fresh, and I plan to visit it next month to enjoy the riverside views and take photographs.

× Student: Yes, I usually went to parks after school when I was a child. I hung out with my friends and.

✓ Yes, I usually went to parks after school when I was a child. I hung out with my friends.

句子末尾出现不完整的结构：“and” 后面没有接内容，导致句子不完整。应删除多余的“and”或补充并列成分以完成句子。例如此处直接删除“and”即可使句子完整。

× Student: Yes, I like going to parks and enjoying the fresh air. There is a big park near my home so I usually go to parks with my parents.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks and enjoying the fresh air. There is a big park near my home, so I usually go to the park with my parents.

“go to parks” 在特指家附近的那一个公园时应使用定冠词“the park”或单数形式以保持一致性和明确性。此外第二句两个独立分句之间需要逗号连接“so”。建议使用“the park”而不是复数，以与前面提到的“a big park”一致。

× Student: Absolutely yes. I think parks play a big role in our social life and it can prove air quality.

✓ Absolutely yes. I think parks play a big role in our social life and they can improve air quality.

原句中主语“parks”是复数，但后半句用“it”不一致，且动词“prove”用法不当，应为“improve”（改善）。因此需将代词改为复数“they”，并改正动词为“improve”。（简体中文建议：注意主语与代词的一致性，以及选择正确的动词）

× Student: Yes, there is a new park near my home. It is along the Yangtze River and there are many big trees and many weeds there, so the air is fresh and.

✓ Yes, there is a new park near my home. It is along the Yangtze River and there are many big trees and many weeds there, so the air is fresh.

句子末尾出现不完整的连接词“and”而未接后续内容，導致句子残缺。应删除末尾多余的“and”或补充并列信息。此处删除“and”即可使句子完整流畅。