Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and filler words, and use correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms). Provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I often played there with my sibling. For example, we used to climb trees and play hide-and-seek, which helped us become close. As a result, I have many happy childhood memories from those visits.

提案: Begin with a direct answer, use correct tense and subject-verb agreement, and avoid repetition. Use a linking word to explain why and give a specific routine (when/how often). Keep sentences short and natural.

例: Yes, I still like going to parks, but it depends on my schedule. Because I am busy with work, I usually visit a park only on weekends to relax and get some fresh air.

提案: Answer directly and avoid awkward phrases (e.g., 'community peoples'). Use linking words to give two clear reasons and provide specific examples of benefits. Use natural vocabulary and correct article usage.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide communal spaces where neighbours can meet and socialise. Furthermore, parks improve residents' quality of life by offering places for exercise, relaxation and family activities.

提案: Respond directly and naturally; avoid conditional awkwardness. If you have no specific park in mind, say so and offer a general intention or reason. Use correct tense and simpler phrasing.

例: Not at the moment — I haven't chosen a specific park to visit. If I get the chance in the future, I would like to try a large city park with walking trails and a lake.

× When I was younger, I loved to play in the park with my sibling.

✓ When I was younger, I loved to play in the park with my siblings.

The noun 'sibling' is singular but context implies playing with more than one person; if there was more than one sibling use the plural 'siblings'. If there was only one sibling the original is fine; confirm intended meaning. Use 'sibling' vs 'siblings' to match number. Problem type ID:1

× It allowed us to build a relationship stronger.

✓ It allowed us to build a stronger relationship.

The adjective 'stronger' should come before the noun 'relationship' and the structure 'build a stronger relationship' is the correct noun phrase. Also 'the' before 'relationship' is acceptable but word order was incorrect. Problem type ID:17

× Also going to park, uh, also allow me to have fun and uh, having the good memories.

✓ Also, going to the park allowed me to have fun and to create good memories.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'park' when speaking about parks in general in this context. Verb forms must be consistent (past tense 'allowed') and use infinitive 'to create' rather than gerund fragment 'having the good memories'. Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'good memories'. Problem type ID:17

× Actually it's depend on the time.

✓ Actually it depends on the time.

Subject-verb agreement and present simple tense require the third person singular verb form 'depends' with subject 'it'. Change 'depend' to 'depends'. Problem type ID:6

× Nowadays I get little bit busy with work and I do not have the enough time to to go for to visit the visit the park.

✓ Nowadays I get a little bit busy with work and I do not have enough time to visit the park.

Add the article 'a' before 'little bit'. Remove duplicate 'to' and unnecessary 'for to'. Use 'enough time' not 'the enough time'. Use 'visit the park' with 'the' for a specific noun. Clean up repetition. Problem type ID:14

× So usually I visited the park in the weekends on the weekends only.

✓ So usually I visit the park on weekends only.

Use present simple 'visit' to describe habitual actions. Remove duplicate phrase 'in the weekends' and use 'on weekends' (no article) or 'at the weekends' in British English. Keep tense consistent with habitual meaning. Problem type ID:5

× Yes, absolutely, it is a great opportunity to build more parks in the city in order to build the strong relationship between the community peoples.

✓ Yes, absolutely, it would be a great opportunity to build more parks in the city in order to strengthen relationships within the community.

Use modal 'would be' to express a hypothetical or recommended opportunity. 'Build the strong relationship' is awkward; use 'strengthen relationships'. 'Community peoples' is incorrect — use 'the community' or 'community members'. Problem type ID:4

× Moreover, park also helps to improve the quality of life of the citizens.

✓ Moreover, parks also help to improve the quality of life for citizens.

Use plural 'parks' to match general statement and change verb to plural 'help'. Use 'for citizens' or 'of citizens' rather than 'of the citizens' depending on generality. Adjust article 'park' to 'parks'. Problem type ID:12

× No, I didn't think about it yet.

✓ No, I haven't thought about it yet.

When referring to an experience up to now, use present perfect 'haven't thought' rather than simple past 'didn't think'. 'Yet' commonly goes with present perfect. Problem type ID:5

× If I have ever get that opportunity, then I will think about that later.

✓ If I ever get that opportunity, I will think about it later.

Use correct conditional structure: 'If I ever get' (present simple) for a possible future condition. Remove 'have' and use base verb 'get'. Replace 'that' with 'it' for natural reference and remove unnecessary 'then'. Problem type ID:26