Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. "Yes, I loved going to parks as a child."), avoid repetition and grammar errors, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking phrase (e.g. "For example," or "Often,"). Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my father often took me there on weekends and we would go jogging together. Those visits were a good way for us to spend time outdoors and stay active.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and organize details with linking words. Correct small grammar issues (use articles and correct verb forms) and be specific about frequency or context to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks for exercise. Usually I go jogging three times a week, and sometimes I join a Zumba class there because our local park offers group sessions similar to those in the Philippines.

提案: Answer directly and clearly. Use a topic sentence stating your opinion (yes/no) then explain briefly with specific reasons and linking words. Fix grammar (plural and article use) and avoid vague phrases like "I like to use it."

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide space for exercise and relaxation. For instance, additional parks would reduce overcrowding and give neighborhoods easier access to green areas.

提案: Be specific and logical: give one or two clear destinations and explain why you want to visit them. Avoid geographic confusion (Germany is in Europe; Canada is not). Use linking words to connect reasons and keep within five sentences.

例: Yes, I would love to visit parks in Germany and Canada. For example, I want to see Germany's Black Forest parks for their scenic trails, and Canada's national parks like Banff for their mountains and lakes.

× Me and my father are used to it.

✓ My father and I am/are used to it.

Use subject pronouns in subject position and place yourself after the other person. 'Me' is an object pronoun and is incorrect as the subject. Depending on meaning: if you mean 'it was our habit' use 'My father and I were used to it' (past) or 'My father and I are used to it' (present). For present habitual state, use 'My father and I are used to it.' Replace 'Me' with 'My father and I' and position 'I' last.

× Sometimes we we just park for jogging.

✓ Sometimes we just go to the park for jogging.

The sentence has a repetition ('we we') and wrong verb 'park' used instead of 'go to the park'. Also the phrase needs an article 'the' before 'park'. Use 'go to the park' to express visiting a place for jogging.

× I still go to park for fitness, jogging and also dancing because in our park we used to Zumba like in the Philippines.

✓ I still go to the park for fitness, jogging and also dancing because in our park we used to do Zumba like in the Philippines.

You need the definite article 'the' before 'park' when referring to a specific park. Also 'used to Zumba' is incorrect; use 'used to do Zumba' or 'did Zumba' to describe habitual past activity. Keep tense consistent: 'used to do' indicates past habit.

× Yes, I see a lot parks here in our city, but yeah, I like to use it.

✓ Yes, I see a lot of parks here in our city, and I like to use them.

Use 'a lot of' before plural noun and make the noun plural 'parks'. Pronoun must agree in number: 'them' refers to plural 'parks'. Also 'but yeah' is informal; 'and' is clearer here.

× Yes, I like to see parks in Germany, in Europe, especially in Canada, I I want to see the parks there.

✓ Yes, I would like to see parks in Germany and in Europe, especially in Canada; I want to see the parks there.

Use 'would like' to express desire politely and avoid repeating 'I'. Also separate ideas with punctuation. Prepositions 'in Germany' and 'in Europe' are fine; improve flow by linking with 'and'. Repetition 'I I' must be removed.