Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời khá tự nhiên nhưng còn một số lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'parent' → 'parents', 'sport' → 'sports', 'fly kites' → 'fly kites' cần sửa cấu trúc), và câu cuối hơi chung chung. Nên mở rộng bằng một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: tần suất, một kỉ niệm cụ thể) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, definitely. My parents used to take me to the park next to our house almost every weekend to play badminton and fly kites. I particularly remember one afternoon when my kite got stuck in a tree and my father climbed up to get it — moments like that are some of my happiest childhood memories.

提案: Nội dung rõ ràng nhưng nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc (ví dụ: 'going to park' → 'going to parks', 'it's not far outdoor activities' không đúng, 'I went' → 'I go', 'a quite quieter place' dư từ). Cần sửa ngữ pháp, dùng thì nhất quán và thêm linking words để diễn đạt lý do rõ ràng hơn.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I don't go there to play sports as much anymore. Instead, I go when I want some peace and quiet because, as I've gotten older, I prefer a calm place to read or think.

提案: Ý tưởng rõ ràng và phù hợp, nhưng câu hơi dài và có vài chỗ không tự nhiên ('take a breath' nên là 'take a breath of fresh air' hoặc 'relax'). Nên tách thành hai câu ngắn, dùng từ vựng chính xác hơn và đưa thêm lợi ích cụ thể để thuyết phục hơn.

例: Yes, definitely. If there were more parks in Mercedes, people would have additional places to exercise and enjoy outdoor activities. Moreover, these green spaces would offer a chance to relax and get some fresh air, improving residents' well-being.

提案: Câu trả lời ngắn và bị dang dở (câu cuối không hoàn chỉnh). Có lỗi ngữ pháp ('has only been in my travel list many years' → 'has been on my travel list for many years'). Cần hoàn thành ý, thêm chi tiết cụ thể (tên hoặc đặc tính của công viên, hoạt động muốn làm) và dùng linking words để mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I would love to visit a large botanical park that I have had on my travel list for many years. I'm especially keen to see the rare plant collections and take photographs of the landscaped gardens, and I hope to spend a whole day exploring its different themed areas.

× My parent used to take me to the park next to our house for outdoor activities and sport like badminton or fly kites.

✓ My parents used to take me to the park next to our house for outdoor activities and sports like badminton or flying kites.

'Parent' should be plural 'parents' when referring to both caregivers. 'Sport' should be plural 'sports' when listing examples. 'Fly kites' is incorrect word order and verb form; use the gerund 'flying kites' to indicate the activity.

× Yes, I still like going to park now but it's not far outdoor activities or playing sport anymore.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park now but I no longer go there for outdoor activities or to play sports.

'Going to park' needs the definite article 'the park'. 'It's not far outdoor activities' is ungrammatical; better to say 'I no longer go there for outdoor activities'. 'Playing sport' should be 'to play sports' to express purpose and use plural 'sports' for general activities.

× I went there whenever I feel like to be alone.

✓ I go there whenever I feel like being alone.

Tense consistency: use present 'go' with 'whenever I feel like' to express habitual action. After 'feel like' use the gerund 'being', not the infinitive 'to be'.

× Maybe because I'm older now so I like to be at a quite quieter place.

✓ Maybe because I'm older now, I like to be in a much quieter place.

'Quite quieter' is incorrect because 'quieter' already comparative; combine with 'much' or remove 'quite'. Use 'in' a place not 'at', and add a comma to connect clauses. 'So' is unnecessary when 'maybe because' is used.

× Of course, yes, if there are more parks in Mercedes, people will have more places to play sports and do some outdoor activities, and we can also go sightseeing or take a breath anytime we want.

✓ Of course. If there were more parks in Mercedes, people would have more places to play sports and do outdoor activities, and we could also go sightseeing or take a breath whenever we want.

Conditional: the original mixes 'if there are' with future 'will' but context suggests hypothetical; use subjunctive 'if there were' with 'would'. 'Do some outdoor activities' is wordy; 'do outdoor activities' is natural. 'Anytime' is acceptable but 'whenever' fits better.

× It has only been in my travel list many years.

✓ It has been on my travel list for many years.

Use 'been on my travel list' not 'in', and include 'for' to indicate duration. 'Only' placement was awkward; removing it clarifies meaning.

× I want to visit there for sightseeing and.

✓ I want to visit it for sightseeing.

'Visit there' is less natural than 'visit it' (referring to the park) or 'go there'. The original ends with 'and.' which is incomplete; remove the conjunction and finish the sentence properly.